distant, fading, almost forgotten
days-gone-by are vapors in sunlight
blades of grass already cut
making way for lush new growth
dwell not on yesterday,
be watchful for tomorrow
Author notes
Prompt: Tuesday's gone with the wind
30 Words
A contest entry
- Quickie Prompt by Little Eagle.
300 points, ended July 17, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for your entry
Hmm, vapors has more of a negative connotation for me. But I like the total package. A good interpretation of the prompt.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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thank you~
i approached it with a "dust in the wind" thought-base. the prompt says "tuesday's gone with the wind," the operative word being "gone."
God bless
~ tim
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What more can i say! Loved this verse! Each line was a treasure.
Very good flow and makes perfect sence for this prompt.
I hope you get a trophy this is really great!
Hugs
and
love
~Lisa~
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Poetic titles are always a good sign!!
"days-gone-by"
HYPHENS. THEY'RE SU-BLIIIIMEEEEE!!!
Nice phrase as well.
"vapors in sunlight"
I like. No more to be said.
"blades of grass already cut"
Summerry!!! LoL, the contest prompt makes me think of Gypsy-Princess.
"be watchful for tomorrow"
Nice. Makes me think of suns going down and up..
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Beautiful. I think the ending couplet is a little too detached from the imagery of the first too...BUT it perfectly sums up your point from the prompt. I think this is a very effective take on the prompt and wish you a trophy in the contest! Good luck friend!
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A superb take on the prompt. Gorgeous write and surely a winner! I just love the line *days-gone-by are vapors in sunlight* Though the entire piece is awesome! Best of luck my friend.
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AMEN!
30 great words here. Superb, fellow poet.
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