You coaxed the breath
Straight out of me
Realistic sabotage
Running thoroughly
It keeps me going
Keeps me sane
Why does your bashing
Make me feel so enslaved?
You're oblivious
To my life
You've neglected me constantly
Yet I still fight
It's gentle and calm
While you're so vicious
Why does your tangible bashing
Make me feel so young?
Withdrawal comes
Yet I want more
Continuously craving
I'm undoubtedly crazy
Imprisoned and hesitant
To every pain
Why does your bashing
Make me feel so deceived?
This has to cease
This brutal affair
It's hurting and haunting
Causing me to be gluttonous
I feed off the pain
It's such a blunder
Why does your heartless bashing
Make me feel like an exploited shadow?
Author notes
I used 15 of words; I am sorry if I used too many or changed the form of them. D:
If Kathy is reading this, which she will eventually...
She'd know that I go through this..
I know it sounds stupid
But I like it...but I don't.
My step-cousin beats me up sometimes...and I love it.
Irony: The line about making me feel young...
MY LAST NAME :333
A contest entry
- *~*Options*~* by Asylaarix.
450 points, ended July 26, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Not my best, but comments would be great :]
Comments
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Honey, I am very impressed that you used more then 10 words ... it was brilliantly penned, beautiful and yet so so very sad at the same time. I love the AN ... It just helped me better understand ... I'm in love with this piece ... this contest is going to be very hard to judge ... Much love and respect to you for putting yourself out there like that, you are truly a brave and talented individual. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest darling.
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i read
lol.
i liked the author notes. =D
it was also a lovely poem.
yes lovely =D
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:D
I freakin' love you, Kat.
So...next story I make, you, me, and Jacob are gonna be the main characters, k? Yes. This poem has given me inspiration suddenly to make MORE stories. xD
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