The early morning sunshine
Falls softly on the dock
Sparking water, it sizzles
When it splashes on the rocks
For the silent sun rays get hot
In the afternoon of summer
Simplicity sincere is special
As we snuggled for a snapshot
And little snippets we hear
At the end of a perfect day
Author notes
Sunshine,softly, sparking, sizzles, silent, simplicity, sincere, special,snuggle, snapsot,snippets,
A contest entry
- ~ Summer Word Bank ~ by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended July 27, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Say what you think
Comments
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I like how you just slipped the words from the wordbank in without making them overpower the poem. They fit in very nicely; this is a very nicely rounded poem and a good read.
Well penned.
~lost
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Sounds like the perfect day. Well done, great use of the word bank. THanks for entering and best wishes,
Frogz -
Summer brings out so many wonderful things,
a joy to read this. thank you for joining in and bringing us some visions of summer.
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
Hello Katie, you have penned a lovely visual poem but may I alert you to a couple of things that you need to do for the contest? Firstly, you need to put all the wordbank words in your author notes in the order that you have used them and secondly, unless Frogster as made a mistake the word "sparkling" should be "sparking" I hope you don't mind me pointing these out. Well done and good luck in the contest. Val
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Thank you Elfin, I sure do appreciate your thoughtfulness and pointing this out to me. I guess I need to proof read my poetry more than once. The eyes are getting old.
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