You think I'm hard to please? If so, do share
A way I might appease my dreams by way
Of dulling down my tastes. My wants less rare,
I might have better luck in love today!
If I could somehow long for something less...
A puncture maybe rather than a kiss?
A clawed paw in the place of a caress?
If I could love my hates I'd conquer this...
If I but had the will to end my quest,
To settle for a monster's dim dim charms,
I could put all my hopes and dreams to rest;
No need to fill the space between my arms.
If only I would end this trying wait,
I'd have a lover - one I'd really hate.
Please tell me what you think
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Bandits United!
Love this from start to finish. Great flow & consistency, the tone, content & rhyme are wonderful! 
The sarcasm & wit are excellent! Bravo. Your last line ties this up so neatly:
If only I would end this trying wait,
I'd have a lover - one I'd really hate.
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A wonderful write
the claws instead of the hugs ..
Thank you for your entry and best wishes
Julie
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Excellent poem. You conveyed your thoughts clearly and this was a well penned piece.
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Wonderful, succinct, cogent and as funny as can be... superb, as always... bravo... bravo.. bravo
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If I could love my hates I'd conquer this...If only I would end this trying wait,I'd have a lover - one I'd really hate. wonderful poem full of strong emotions all the way through very powerful espeically the last line good luck in the contest
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Love the last line--
Excellent flow of unforced rhyme!
Well Done & Best of luck in this contest!
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yes indeed dear, some of us are just not quite fit for this day in age...but don't fret, there are good fellows out there, one's who long for the same sweetness of love. peace be with you cheri
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Settling is definitely overrated, stranger. You end up hating yourself more than the other person.
Nicely worded.
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