you celebrated your birthday
by drinking too much and leading me on,
stumbling on every word
that left my dick throbbing
and my hand buried in my pocket
as you whispered the things you would do
to desecrate my body;
luring me into your cave when i know that tomorrow
i'll be just another stone
among piles.
Author notes
July 11th, early morning
A contest entry
- Give it to me! by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended August 1, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I LYKE CRITIKZ!!
Comments
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Create a story between real people in an honest-to-God moment. - I checked out the contest after I read this and read it again cos I always think it helps give a better explanation of the poem. You certainly did that ^.
Last lines, immense.
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This is incredible stuff. I had looked it over awhile back ago when the contest was first featured, and quite honestly, that's the reason why I didn't enter as I thought this was gonna win gold for sure. lol
I think I'm gonna have to check out your other stuff in the future as many have already recommended that I should do so.
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Genius.
Don't touch this babes.
It's perfect. Though I'm not sure about...
Just kidding.
Great work.
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Excellent piece.
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