On a beach,secret desires met
mouths gone dry,and palms with sweat
each wondered how the other could be so brave
Here they found without much hastle
they could build the walls of a castle
a place were their hungers they could stave
Under star and irredescent moon
the smell of salt,the sound of loon
all they could offer both eagerly gave
In the heat of passions throes
swaying to song only longing could compose
hearts conducters now rose from restless grave
Two young lovers found coronation
touching hands in soft dissipatation
imprints in the sand...gone now with a wave
Author notes
xxxlizardkingxxx
A contest entry
- Make me want to fall in love (2) by Spiritual Soul.
1000 points, ended July 19, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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In the heat of passions throes
swaying to song only longing could compose
hearts conducters now rose from restless grave
no erotica -
Thank you for your wonderful entry! The last part was the best:
Two young lovers found coronation
Touching hands in soft dissipatation
Imprints in the sand...Gone now with a wave
Wonderful. And thanks for following the rules! -
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Thank you for the comments.I'm glad you enjoyed the piece.As for the rules...that's why they're there,right?
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And oh, how easily that wave can wash it away. Lovely stolen moments captured here. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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that was gorgeous
just absolutely gorgeous -
aw this was beautiful! Such love and emotion show in this piece. Amazing job, I don't know what else to say! this was great! Thanks for entering!
Blessings,
~Michaela~ -
This is so beautiful, it makes my band in the other room sound like the dead cries of a raven. You're everything here was spot on, not one flaw to be seen. Just amazing.
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You amaze me, as always.
I am in love with this poem.
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