1 part abuse of some kind
1 part neglect
2 parts heartbreak
1 part selflessness
2 parts loneliness
3 parts depression
½ part failure
1 ½ parts needy
½ part fear of rejection
4 parts chivalry
2 parts self hate
1 part martyrdom
Combine abuse, neglect and heartbreak; stir until drama forms. Add failure. Set aside until ingredients adhere to loneliness.
Beat together ½ part failure, ½ part fear of rejection, and then cover with self hate.
Kneed chivalry and selflessness with combined ingredients of loneliness; continue until well needy.
Bake internally at 98.6 degrees for no less than 10 years. When depression is fully formed, all inclusive ingredients equal martyrdom; thus creating a sense of worthlessness fed by a desire to help, heal… and love - as he has only dreamed.
Because of his altruistic demeanor and sensitivity, he often and repeatedly becomes friends with women (subsequently hearing them complain about their abusive relationships) Martyrdom kicks in. He thinks: “I’ll be here for you, I’ll listen and I’ll hold your hand.” But he won’t ‘make a move’ because that’s thinking selfishly, and he’ll do everything in his power to be the exact opposite of the kind of guys that cause so much pain to his female friends.
His friends love his companionship, but eventually move on and find a new guy. The new guy often has jealousy issues with him as “The Nice Guy” being so close with his girlfriend, causing a separation.
“The Nice Guy” deals with this loneliness as he always has, but he doesn’t think of it as a loss so much as he feels rewarded that his female friend is happy (even if it means they’ll never speak again).
A circle begins.
The reality is self sacrifice. “I can not love because I am eternally filled with emptiness”. And it always turns out that the one woman he eventually shows genuine affection for… walks all over him. She manipulates him as arrogant guys do women. “I love you” is a lie and she’ll never answer his questions of “Why?”
This seals his fate, a good guy scarred by hate; his heart… used as a sieve and so… alone, he e'er lives.
By: Jaye Eryk
Copyright ©2008
A contest entry
- Good Guys, You Out There? by Sesheta.
600 points, ended September 13, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Non-monosyllabic comments welcomed
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I like it :)
Its sad but true. Chicks don't really care they just want someone to give them a leg up to make them happy. Once that's done there is no need for the nice guy.
Theres a study out there that showed 1 in 5 women making their own x rated videos and becoming more and more sexually involved with randoms. Which in simpler terms means they are turning into the men they despised as they were growing up.
I love your writing style you're such a good writer
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Can Someone Say Gold Winner!
I sure can, and you are so clever bro, you brought it to the poetic plate, and then some. Very true, and I can vouch for ya in the math and pang areas, you know them both well. The proof is in the invisible pudding. Great job Poe bro.
PW
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You're the first person to ever say I know math well, lol.
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wooooow
I loved it! amazing what a profound why of puting your words! i am so amazed at such telant.so cuteeeeeeeee and sweeeeeet...i was wondering what lies within such title 
juliet
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wow that was amazing. it was like reading a personality profile. truly good. very sad too. interesting take on this prompt and well done.
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lets start cooking..i cant wait,^_^ you get it right man...i really like it.
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hmmm...
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You're too innovative
This may be the most innovative thing you've ever come up with, Trioxin.
I love how you list out the recipe..& here's the major--ALL OF IT IS COHESIVE throughout...it's bitterly cynical w/o actually sounding that bitter. It's self-awareness. It's...awesomeness.
"stir until drama forms."
I LOVE THAT!!
"cover with self hate."
YowZA...ouch. I wonder...do you intentionally not use hyphens in between 'self-hate' and 'self-sacrifice' for some poetic reason, or you just don't like hyphens?
"altruistic demeanor"
I don't have this myself...but maybe this is a recipe for disaster, even though it's a good quality.
"Bake internal at 98.6 degrees for no less than 10 years"
WOW. I love this. It sounds personal.
"used as a sieve"
Dunno what a sieve is.
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This unique syle amazed me right off the bat; you took the recipe metaphor to a whole new, amazing level, and I love it! The words themselves were beautiful, and heartbreaking...it explained so well what people "know" but rarely think about, unless they are one such...the description was very informative, and very unfortunate, and I must read it again...oh, I do wish we could all just read each others minds, know each others hearts, and understand each others truths...but alas, there are so many lies...fantastic entry, thank you for sharing your views with me.
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Wow that's really good. Nice recipe. It's probably true.
& to be honest I think it's true. Women secretly find all the wrong men and screw their best guy friends over. = /
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