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Concealed Longing

 

& she's longing for a mystery,
Something true but dark,
In her eyes speak such a history,
And on you she wants to leave her mark,

This vampyress, so troubled,
She's enigmatic and in anguish,
Everyday the pain seems to be doubled,
Every breath is ripped away with languish,

What hides between the fine lines,
Of her awe-inspiring mind and that "I'm OK" smile,
Your kisses taste sweeter then the finest wines,
Yet she stays hopeful and in every mile,

that she graces the land with gentle walks,
walking through the nettles staying so strong,
And the light creeps with every step it stalks,
But the darkness is her home, eternity is long,



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prompts:
image: Darkness_by_larafairie
quote: "The worst loneliness is not to be comfortable with yourself."-Mark Twain

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  • Handcuffs of Love
    December 28, 2008
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    Darkness indeed. Intriguing. I liked it a lot.


  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 27, 2008

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    WOOT

    -dances- This is my FAVORITE Vampyric poem, EVER. ^.^ I'm full of envy syndrome at the current time. You've got such flow with your words. This is an absolutley gorgeous piece.
    ..wonderful



    ~IvoRy


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 25, 2008
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    Wow i like this alot. Lovers the picture :] your the bestest ever!! love, Shelly :]


  • HiddenByTheDark
    July 24, 2008

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    I love the backround, picture but mostly the poem... it's so strong and creative.. keep penning

    ♥always Kate


  • VoltaicHypnosis
    July 23, 2008

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    Fascinating... wicked m/g by the way, and a worgthy place m'dear... I like it! Loses points for disrupted flow but its still a gorgeous piece.


  • Immortalbeauty
    July 22, 2008

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    wow...this is awesome..."What hides between the fine lines,
    Of her awe-inspiring mind and that "I'm OK" smile,
    Your kisses taste sweeter then the finest wines,
    Yet she stays hopeful and in every mile,

    that she graces the land with gentle walks,
    walking through the nettles staying so strong,
    And the light creeps with every step it stalks,
    But the darkness is her home, eternity is long,"

    beautiful and i can so totally relate.




  • Beauty Of Silence
    July 22, 2008

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    wow!

    awesome rhyme >.< i love this, the depth in your words, and the stunning imagery, it all seemed perfect! heart-breaking poem written in a gorgeous way! keep penning!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    Beautifully penned hunni, imagery is awesome. Love the rhyme...a great read as ever. Congrats on the HM and good luck in this contest

    P.S Lurve the BG...awesome!!


  • Evernight Prince
    July 19, 2008
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    Another cool and well written piece, as i've come to expect from you vampyress.


  • Love-EroticPoet
    July 19, 2008
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    I'll share eternity with you. Great imagetry as always. Each line drew me in more and more


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    July 18, 2008

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    This is a really cool poem. I like the way you describe loneliness. I loved the imagery too. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Nothing But No
    July 18, 2008
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    This is fucking fantastic doll, you've outdone yourself...truly truly outdone yourself. I'm in awe.


  • WTF-Hatchwork
    July 18, 2008

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    Cool is it done?

    I'd let you bite me But I'm filled with moose piss. Mark or not thats something I don't even thing a vapyr would bite into and like.


  • Angelflower
    July 18, 2008
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    You did a good job.. I like where you went with this.. congrats on the hm..

    Angel


  • Re-invention silver member
    July 17, 2008

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    wow.. from your lack of rhyme you did great here.. no forceful rhyming which is great a great imaginary also and a very powerful take on both prompts which is extravagantly excellent nicely done!


  • WTF-Hatchwork
    July 17, 2008
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    heh


  • FieryHollow
    July 17, 2008
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    Oo, very very pretty!! I luffles it

    ~Whit


  • Re-invention silver member
    July 17, 2008
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    lol whats your choice of prompt today??

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