we will fish today
the sky is just right
I see boats floating
in the best spots
soon the tide will come
all the way to here
uncle and I will fish
Author notes
in a child's mind
Picture Prompt: once upon a time in China....
By: Foureyes .
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie by Cupcrazy.
800 points, ended July 18, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I love constructive criticism
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I see it clearly, can almost smell the water
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Amazing how the child's mind works at times. Cure work here James! Nice job on the honorable winner cup too!
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I could feel the general satisfaction of the child who had been waiting for morning to see if he would be able to enjoy that special time together with his uncle and the fish. Keep up the good work, you are so talented.
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I can remember me son when he was senior school age. He went fishing and brought back a dirty big fish and put it in me bath tub. After a few days i told him to take it back.He was so upset.
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awww. this is cute. I can definitely see a little child looking out over the dock. A great little piece.
~Pt
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Very simplistically beautiful, thanks for the great entry. Hugs, Bunny
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I'm not even going to look at the photo (although I love photo inspired poetry) because I can see it very clearly through your work...
...oh heck, I will look after all, but it will be like seeing the movie after reading the book...
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