Valentine's night -
my love token
begins to wilt
the bush blooms
from an early shower
morning glory
sunlit bikini
above her thighs
thoughts wander
nude portrait -
a delicate brushstroke
makes her smile
in the water
an eyeful of moon
midnight swim
last shag
on the breakwater
ebb tide
the old bell
still peals perfectly -
wedding anniversary
she yawns
while haymaking
so nearly autumn
Please tell me what you think
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heheh ... forethought ... syllable count is fine when learning what a syllable is in primary school .... haiku has come a long way since then ...
i hope you will find some GOOD reading material to help you with that thought ... and you have started in a good place in reading Tishu's HAIKU >>> Gina
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This is softly touching, as I read it felt as though a paint brush was tickling my mind trying to paint the imagery upon it.
I enjoy the flow of this Haiku chain
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Dear Tishu,
I personally think your haiku are beautiful. I will be happy when I can do as well if ever...I am just now learning how to write haiku. Taking the class offered by haikmonk and being taught by Myron. I am stuck on assignment # 6...lots of learning to go. It is not as easy as one might think ...several words with so much meaning...Thank you for posting this so I knew about it...Darlene
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Thank you Darlene - I am pleased that these may have inspired you. It is one of the reasons why I put these compilations up for viewing. I am glad that you are being coached in haiku by haikumonk and myron. Myron was my mentor a few years back and we still correspond.
Say what you see.
Tishu
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This is one of those "feel good" poems. I like your soft suggestive hints that are laced to nature. Very well done.Pen on...
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Lovely, with hidden love messages laced throughout. I love how you used nature with your feelings, thanks for sharing
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Very thoughtful. It has a surreal sense of reality.
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This is a wonderful collection of haiku, Tishu. This one is my favorite:
the old bell
still peals perfectly -
wedding anniversary
That is sweet.
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Some nice haikuing. Takes a special writer to make something out of very little. You've accomplished this feat happy trails
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This poem is interesting.
I like it, it has a very nice feel to it.
Good work indeed.
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