On high a golden harvest moon
winking slyly at me as I eye the sky:
glittering stars, a timely boon.
I often wish that I could fly.
Winking slyly at me as I eye the sky,
The stars outshine the primal dark.
I often wish that I could fly;
I hear a night bird's cheerful cry.
The stars outshine the primal dark;
like fires from some celestial camp.
I hear a night bird's cheerful cry,
oblivious to cold and damp.
Like fires from some celestial camp,
each star's a twinkling spark.
Oblivious to cold and damp,
I love cold midnight in the park.
Each star's a twinkling spark,
and the breezes hum a cheery tune.
I love cold midnight in the park:
on high a golden harvest moon.
Author notes
My first pantoum, quasi- or otherwise.
A contest entry
- #104 at Winklings for Winklings and Friends elsewhere of Pamela A Lamppa by Lyndon.
6000 points, ended August 28, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is beautifully breath taking! I love it! And i only have one thing to say about this and maybe it is to not make the backgrounds so distracting... I personally love pretty flashing colors.... and i kept losing my place because I was watching the stars LOL but as far as the writing is was spectacular! Thanks for entering and good luck!!
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Thanks ...
the reason I haven't changed the background is that I no longer am a Silver member and if I change the background, I will lose it. I really hate to do that.
It's hell to be poor.
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we are not bound by meter we use it well, this is a wonderful pantum form, expressive and the refrains lend music...a lyrical quality...this poem brings a celebration of a pleasing occassion. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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Beautifully done. Your rhythm and flow are spectacular. I really enjoyed the background as well. I'm going to have to figure out where people find all these.
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ooooh I liked this! Really I did! I liked the line "Like fires from some celestial camp, each star's a twinkling spark" That is good, really good. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.
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I love this Pantoum. Thank you for placing it here my friend. I have learned so much from your wonderful assistance with my poetry. You are good to me. 
~Pamela 
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of night
Lovely pantoum it had a mystery feel of night's mysteries with an astral surround. Smooth flow.
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Well brother, you do this form justice. Actually, a lot better than anything I would come up with if I tried. LOL I am not worthy. Good luck and write on. One.
Dez
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Nonsense ...
you'd do fine if you put your mind to it.
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