The eyes behind the lashes pulled him in
Her legs enticed his eyes to secret spots
The way she licked her lips he thought of sin
Forgot his Mother's talk of "No"s and "Not"s
She slowly sipped the drink he bought for her
And gently raised a hand that he might kiss
She moved to let him sit without demur
He never thought her actions were amiss
Nobody saw the way the lady left
Police were called but could not find a clue
In interviews the fam'ly were bereft
But no-one came to tell them what they knew
The mystery could never be explained
How can a body be completely drained?
Author notes
something a little edgy
I hope
In a list
A contest entry
- ~A little bit of edge~ by Sailor Ptolema.
1575 points, ended July 22, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come all Vampire lovers by oka-dokie-okie.
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Most wonderfully and most deftly done, sir! Another one, bites the dust... the lovely vampire strikes again! fine. bravo...
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Bravo
Oh, this IS sooo excellent! Vampires are done to death, but you have proven that less is so very much MORE! A superb vampire sonnet! Loved it!! Bravo!!!
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Ooooooo I like the mystery left in the end. Great job.
~Oka/KC -
oh man! this is creept! makes me think of the book "Taking Lives'. That some raw , chilling shit lol. I like this. You went beyond and told a good story! Clean; & cohesive. I didn't get lost; so THANK YOu for that. Then ending really leaves the reader with a mystery..... I like that
. A seductive serial /vampire (maybe?) killer 
. NIce.
thanks for entering and g'luck!
~Pt
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Wooooooo....twisty end sends shivers. Good dark write keeps you hanging...Good Luck
xxx Bumpy
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Lol this is spooky indeed.
Gotta love a bit of mystery.
Good work.
Samuel -
Ooooo....spooky!!!!!
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