how come you have to leave now
i need you more than you know
i look up to you
but i never told you i did
i know this is whant you want
but i don't want to loose you
not now not yet
this war can take someone eles
not you
i don't know what i would do
if i lost you
i need you here
i love you
they cant take you
your my only full sibling i got
i know i couldn't stand the pain
of looseing you.
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heartfelt
this poem makes me feel empathetic for you,loosing someone u love is a very difficult thing to face and when they are all u have that ads to the fear and to the pain, the spelling makes it a little rough, but I can hear ur feelings in this, you can feel the loss of control in this ....and the desperation.Good luck in my contest thnx for entering, plz dont reply until contest is over! -
Is this about what I think it's about?! Damn girl! I love you and if you need to talk, please talk to me! Great write!
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Good work
Only problem is watch the spelling.
It's a good young poem.
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