Mirror mirror on the stupid wall
reflector of something cold
creator of something old and small
I hate you for showing me as I am
a killer of man
I hate you for showing the pain
in me
I hate you for what I see
Mirror mirror on the bloody
fragile wall
image maker for all
why do you make me look so old
and small
why do I look so cold
I hate you for what I see
I hate you for showing the
anger in me
Mirror mirror on the blood soaked
erratic wall
I'm so cold and look so old
So in pain, with nobody to blame
running against myself to
escape fame
Oh I hate you
I hate you for the image I must view
I hate you for reflecting what
is true
Mirror mirror on the stupid wall
broken fragments of me on the floor
echoes of my mind in pieces galore
an aurora of different shades
falling therefore
showing the flaws I would solemnly
ignore
Mirror mirror, broken mirror on
the castle wall
I hate you for showing the
weakness in me
I hate you for the person I see
complex and scathing to man
highly mordant and less then
I planed
Mirror mirror, remnants of me
on the wall
cold and shiver as I fall
splinter parts long and sharp
Oh mirror mirror, token mirror
on the wall
far within you've shaken me
Eyes that fear I now see
for that I hate you
I hate you
I hate you for that I be
Author notes
The mirror never lies, it shows you as you are, If you don't like what you see, change it. Inspiration comes from ones own inner insecurity's.
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A contest entry
- Anything and Everything!!! by LivinitupCutie.
450 points, ended July 28, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mirror Mirror On The Wall-- by Ignis Corpus.
550 points, ended February 28, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Prewrites by Blue-Rose Beauty.
625 points, ended September 16, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Too repetitious, I didn't especially like what you turned this in to but everyone is for their own tastes.
Mirror mirror, remnants of me
on the wall
cold and shiver as I fall
splinter parts long and sharp
I do love those lines though, thanks for entering and good luck. -
Wow this was fucking Awesome!
One of my favorites by you,, this and "
One line too many" Another great write
Stuff like this is why your on my favorites list
-♥Amy♥
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awesome
moonsail was right. a genius of dark
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Wow, this is good. I loved how you used a killer's view on a mirror. Some parts I stumbled upon but the grusomeness made up for it in the end. I enjoyed this very much just having the lines make an image in my head. I can see it clearly. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Ignis corpus -
Awsome!!
Poem great, holding vivid imagery, also the authour notes are so true. xx
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love the poem, love the authors comments and its a lesson all in one. a fantastic piece,
hugs,
georgie,
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wooooow now this dark i love it it gives me a chill and i think i will have to see if my mind wonders and ponders for the reflection on what i must wright to top it .. it inspires me is all im saying and that is hard to do ...
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Nice write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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its nice..but not right for this contest..not very creative/orginial..although i do like the mirror mirror on the way...a nice way to incorporate fairy tale into reality and into a poem..rhythm is a bit disrupted..but a nice poem of feeling...just to show more next time..good luck in the contest
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it's true that one mirror can show everything that in your mind truly believes either it's positive and negative..it never lies only show the truth..i like how you put it all together and a bit of fantasy into this..beautifully written..thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Keep penning!!!
Lieu
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yes, the AN was perfect
hmm some of the rhyme was iffy and the flow was a bit dodgy in parts, but it was just so raw. i love this, because you used a good analogy, combining the innocence of a fairy tale with reality. i love the emotion in this and i can really relate well. overall good write, though. im not really fond of how you said mirror mirror on the stupid wall. it jsut seems kinda...i dunno. un needed. you could have probably done better with making each of the words have a particular place.but i LOVE the lines :
Mirror mirror, remnants of me
on the wall
cold and shiver as I fall
splinter parts long and sharp
amazing stuff.
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Very good.
I felt this and believed it. This didn't seem superficial like so many other poems that I have read. Well done.
finalist -
WOW
you are powerful writer...your words leave one to think and ponder there own self and their beliefs...winner for sure, good luck in the contest
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You are just plain good.I like this.Concept,imagery...progressiveness.Wicked!
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