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The Voice at the Wall

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The Voice at the Wall

A minion comes to worship me
To send their prayers expectantly
They follow all the Jewish laws
And bow their heads in eulogy

The wall provides a reverent pause
As they reflect on scripture clause
They know the wall will soon explode
From ice in cracks that never thaws

When letters in the cracks are sowed
They spark the Faithful’s heavy load
The rabbis pray and children point
Still, stone is stone and walls erode

Yet still the men I will anoint
And I shall never disappoint
Nor decimate the human will
Nor bend their bones beyond the joint

I aerate the blood they spill
When conflict causes them to kill

A burst of faith will actuate
And ease the struggle they instill

The wall will not eradicate
Nor trips to it shall trigger peace
The wall will not eliminate
Nor block the entrance to my gate

 

 

 

Author notes

Word Bank:
Decimate, Explode, Ice, Minion, Pause, Point, Aerate, Blood, Detonate, Spark, Struggle, Actuate, Burst, Trigger, Trip, Eradicate


Interlocking Rubáiyát:
The rubai (plural rubaiyat) is a Persian verse form. Each rubai stanza is a quatrain, in which lines 1, 2 and 4 all rhyme. The rhyme scheme interlocks stanza to stanza: aaba, bbcb. ccdc ...

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  • Eusebius
    September 16, 2008

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    A form that is too little used now a days, unfortunately. You have done a superb piece here! bravo...


  • jo-el
    July 22, 2008

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    most excellent use of the word bank. i was surprised to see it in fact. the flow was that natural to me. the thought the ideas throughout to be well expressed. especially found the last stanza to be poignant. excellent


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    Wow! Using a form in a wordbank contest! I'm so impressed! I wouldn't have even known it was wordbank until I got to your authors notes... and the subject matter is amazing also!!

    You are a woman of deep thought, and I found this poem so full of meaning! I shall be pondering it for some time! And bookmarking it!

    Outstanding Amera!!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    July 18, 2008

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    I agree, Runic suits the form and theme when combined
    as it is here...with depth of vocabulary and meaning.
    So unexpected to see this pulled from the bank given,
    making the writer even more of a wonder in my eyes
    then she already is. Blue


    PS-faithful has an extra l


  • capricornpoet
    July 17, 2008
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    intriguing form

    reads runic and prophetic..i may try this form sometime..excellent as usual...


  • Skybow silver member
    July 17, 2008

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    Your true colors shine like a rainbow on that wall. God must love you and so do I. A beautiful and flowing poem.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 17, 2008

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    great form! I turned down the word bank as too unpoetic, as usual you have proved me wrong.
    Great stuff
    And anything in a rubaiyat is a winner anyway, this is a winner amongst winners.


  • StarEyes
    July 17, 2008

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    I love this one sis!What a great job you did on this one! Until your comment, and list of word bank words, I had no idea! A true master of word bank poems, and to pull it off this well! Beyond words!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • PerVirtuous
    July 17, 2008

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    This is very beautiful with an international feel. I love that you used a Persian verse to describe a Jewish symbol of faith, as I am a lover of irony! You have done wonders with a difficult word bank. I read through and never suspected a word bank was being used. This is beautiful and should do excellent in the contest!


    • Amera gold member
      July 17, 2008

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      Thanks! I think it shows diversity when a Christian poet writes a Jewish poem in a Persian form. Hehe….

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