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No more tomorrows with you…

She slipped from our bear hug
as heavens clock, rang out her time

…stunned disbelief
the only friend surrounding
muting emotion,
killing any beauty by side.

Charcoal clouds spew their rage
Still, it couldn’t match
the intensity of mine;

Tomorrow a letter penned,
burnt and blown above
A gift to passed mother;

This daughter writes of loss and pain,
even after all these years
But blessed, more often
love is given in memories
that bring this women such joy.


Author notes

THIS IS DEDICATED TO MY MUM
rest in peace, my one and only soul mate, my best friend
26/09/1961~19/07/2000

PLEASE, I REALISE THIS IS FOR A CONTEST, BUT UNDERSTAND IT IS OF A VERY PERSONAL NATURE...SO I WOULD APPRECIATE TO NOT HAVE IT CRITIQUED...it is purely from my heart
:)


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  • Margaret Denham gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    To lose your Mother at such a young age as we have makes for a difficult journey at times but there is always the knowledge that they're keeping an eye out for us.

    Maybe they're sitting together somewhere nodding their heads and saying to each other that they knew we'd find each other one day.






  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    It is so hard when someone is taken from you with or without warning, it is brave to put such raw emotion into a piece and that you have. I am sure she would be very proud of you. Best to you


  • KayJay
    July 23, 2008

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    That's all - just
    Ken


  • Angelflower
    July 23, 2008

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    This was such a touching poem.. It brought pain and beauty to the prompt.. You did such a wonderful job.. Memories are something to hold on to..And if they are of love and laughter then it is a treasure that should never be found I really loved this.. Thank you very much for sharing.. Best of luck..


    Angel


  • A m b r e a
    July 18, 2008
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    I love this! so full of emotion and it paints the picture perfectly! Great write!


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    This is such a beautiful poem and a great write for this contest. The words here are so full of emotions and the loves spills from each word. She must be watching you with such love. Brilliant work and all the best for the contest.


  • solitarytear
    July 17, 2008

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    mothers

    are wonderful angels.....they keep us safe and warm through out our lives and even afterwards.....i still have mine and thoe i sometimes moan and groan about her motherly ways i couldnt imagine for a minute not having her here.....i'm sorry for your loss and hope that one day your own child looks up to you and loves you in the same way as you do your own.....

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