What did you beat the stick with, Baby?
a measure of the blame
in your reflected face
There at the edge of the fire
as the heat made beads of sweat
at the borders of your hair
when the stick struck the ground
causing sparks to dance in the air.
the slow drawl creeps to a crawl
bodies by a river
wait to be buried
accompanied
by curses--
star-shine that bakes the Earth,
snap of the fingers unfolds
shock by shock
in the firelight.
'fore the sake of the thought
animals growl outside the circle;
shadows seek a name
a snapped thread
terminus of cocked fear.
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what makes rape so painful
is not what physically happens
but the pain and horror of imposing the abusers will
onto the victim's - bounding the spirit
how cheap can a soul be:
you'll see it in how it trades its humiliation for social status - some call it love,
some - prostitution.
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Fear for Fears Sake
I like Cannonfires comment.
I don't know what to say.
I've read it over and over.
I get it. Maybe that makes it harder.
It's hard.
and Of course I grab at it.
As always.
We bleed for bleedings Sake.
Truth is always beautiful.
No matter the matter
and frosted.
As always
you make the unspeakable
speakable.
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It is a very pointed opening line. I'd be a liar if I said it felt good reading it -- it doesn't. The transference starts taking place right there...
It isn't a familiar Lute poem. It is less humble, more impatient and dare I say -- angry? I sense things in this poem I don't want to put down in a comment
the poem troubles me as well as comforts a part of me (the Truth here does both -- how odd that is).
There is a bitterness here -- about indulging in the carnal and ephemeral (poetically I think). There is fear here on the part of the Author -- and there is of course Death.
Good poem this. Difficult to ingest for there is no comfort here except the wiggly uncomfortable truth.
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Imagery that sparks the reader's imagination.
All lines lead to an adventure and a walk into mysterious places. 
Fine writing, surely.
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I too have read this twice and I'm struggling with the meaning. I will come back later and try again. Pen on...
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This is a unique and thought provoking write for sure. I read through it three times, and am still trying to extract the meaning which you meant in this. I know what transference means, and was trying to go from that, but I am still not really sure. I do like it though because it has made me think. Maybe you could give some hints in your authors notes? Blessings, Patty
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I clicked on this accidently ...
and since it's so far out from anything that means anything to me, I will just applaud it and move on.
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We would all do well to stay inside a sacred circle, nice and warm and ignorant to whatever snaps at the door, but foolish is what humans are and ignorant to, so we peek at what is available...too late to retreat and too scared to go forward. We should bury the dead where the soil is good, not barren and along with them we should bury the fear of staying silent. God I think I am so tired i should just shut up now, but I do like the fact you make me have to think.
C
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