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just haiku

simmering rice grains
in the pot-
patter of rain

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  • DogFish silver member
    January 30
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    Love rice
    love rain
    love this poem
    !

  • mina nagi gold member
    July 23, 2008

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    Sanju.. Very nice imagery... rice is my favorite dish and so is this haiku... I can eat 24/7
    Good luck in the contest...

    mina


  • between slices
    July 19, 2008

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    ah.. that's a wonderful comparison! The many times you see boiling water and an ingredient play around.. A stark reminder is tea.
    I never thought of such a comparison. Haiku really opens the mind.. and eyes.
    This becomes more interesting when you think about the direction of force (rain from above, bubbles from below) and even the temperature levels (hot and cold)..

    bravo!


  • azure85 gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    simmering rice grains
    in the pot-
    patter of rain

    The warmth of the rice, the cold of the rain, the sound of both in contrast. Lots of good images in your haiku, I enjoyed it very much. Thank you so much!


  • myron silver member
    July 18, 2008

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    lovely

    This is a lovely haiku where the rice is being compared to rain. I like that and I like it even more when my nose gets involved because both of these things have their own subtle smell.

    Best wishes in the contest,
    Myron.

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