What have I just done?...
...Easy, you have killed her.
Why me?...
...Because you chose to.
But I loved her...
...You should have put love first.
Why didn't she stay with me...
...Because you didn't put her first.
Then maybe she deserved it...
...Does anyone deserve to be murdered?
Yes, she betrayed me...
...No, your emotions betrayed you.
No! She did, I am certain...
...Again, does anyone deserve to be murdered.
yes! Yes! YES! she did!...
...Than I'm afraid your soul is lost. I have failed.
A contest entry
- Opposites by Darkwell.
450 points, ended July 20, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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the voice of good in your head silenced, love it an it reminds me of Chris Rock when he was talkin bout love an sais you haven't been in love til you practiced your alibi in the mirror
sweet
very well presented and deep
WTG! Good luck in the contest -
Ooh I like this. The last bit was especially good. I like the idea that within us is the good vs. evil battle for our souls. That's pretty cool. Good luck in the contest
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Well Named.
Intense. “...Then I'm afraid your soul is lost. I have failed.”
The deed being done, it appears the Conscience has come to the correct conclusion
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