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Despair's Moonlit View

The dancing black flames
that you hold
heavy
in your Heart.
Your shackles
Rusted and aging,
will not break apart, though
you have stumbled with them for
so long

Longer than I thought
for how much innocence you still
bear
Longer than any
with such soft hands and such a
fragile
heart, surely too tender
to wear such a
heavy
piece of metal, To hold such
deadly
dancing flames

I know the secret
that you carry
with your chains
I've seen the tears
crystallizing on your face
as the fear in your eyes
forces them past their
barricade

I know that secret
very well.
I know your emptiness
your loneliness
your utter despair
I have seen it refelcted back at me
on the moonlight in your eyes

Two pairs of eyes with that sarrow
refelcted within eachother
They face one another
like mirrors
creating a vision of eternity

The moment my moonlight touched you,
I loved you
Before we breathed words to one another
I called you family
Two weary hearts that bore the same heavy yoke
How would I fail to notice your chain
when I labored with its madness myself?

Come, I know you are
so very tired and worn.
Sleep.
Do not be afraid, I
will not let the black
flames chill you.
I will not glare at you
as your nightmares and

your reality
always have in loathing.

Your pure existence gives me
hope.
I will look into your waking eyes
and spend every moment
of that eternity
working
to return the favor.

Author notes

Note: I entered this in a prewrite contest as my favorite one and here's why: This is a poem about the one person who was a true friend to me during the hardest and loneliest time in my life. We recognized each other as hating ourselves for the same reasons and gave each other hope. That person is literally what kept me alive for that whole year and I finally managed to write this piece to express my gratitude.
Thank you for being my saving grace in the truest sense of the phrase.
This is also an expression of my wish to help some one the way that person helped me.

Who is the one person that gives you hope when you are in your deepest despair? I don't know how well this sits with an audience, but it works well for me as far as expression goes. Please tell me if you get the impression that this is a romantic love poem, because that is not my intention and I want to fix it if I need to. Comments and suggestions welcome.

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  • SignifyingNothing
    August 8, 2008

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    I did not get the impression of romance at all. I really think I interpreted it as you intended- as one friend's love for another in their mutual struggle for peace and sanity. This is truly a lovely and VERY moving poem, and one that I will remember long after this contest has ended. I love its gentle, quite beauty, and was very moved by it.

    You and your friend are lucky to have eachother.


  • Jocelyn.Jaded
    July 17, 2008

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    I like this poem. It's not something other people would have the idea to write. ^_^. A like how it's dark and still has hope put in to. Keep up your great work! =]]]


  • Fallen-Phases
    July 17, 2008
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    Beautiful poem! a little bit dark, but uplifting and hopeful to, great job!