wishing I could
find this place called acceptance
its raining.
i am raining
washing myself up
onto island after island.
my blood is
attracted to sand & overflow
its red nutrience shines up at the sky.
(what was inside is out for a barren landscape to see)
my energy blooms
& spirals into a cloud,
it speaks life
with a tremor
& calls you
back,
save me.
Author notes
Uhh this all started with the word "spoken" & this picture:
http://boyradioactive.deviantart.com/art/spoken-for-56907760
Don't want to speak.<3
A contest entry
- pennyroyal tea. by girl shaman.
500 points, ended July 30, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
wish i was a daisy
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"my blood is
attracted to sand & overflow
its red nutrience shines up at the sky.
(what was inside is out for a barren landscape to see)"
I adore that stanza
your writing always has such a tropical feel
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Yay! Go tropical! I'm happy you liked it♥.
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the first line seemed out of place. like it should be the title, almost.
i dunno. i liked it after that.
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Haha, yeah. I wrote it at random like the day before trying to start a poem but nothing happened so the next day i pasted it on my page and made something out of it. So yeah..thats probably why it doesn't fit too well? I'm trying to think of it as like an opening idea or intro not really part of the idea. So yeah you are right =P.
Im happy you liked the rest!!
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If I just said I enjoyed this and then left, would you hate me? I honestly can't think of anything to add that would make this piece stronger. I just like it. Enough said.
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=D thank you soooo much! I am happy you enjoyed it!! ♥ hate you pshhhhh =P.
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Yes I certainly did.
I know you could never hate me.
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