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Lost Love

When you love someone so deep inside,
It seems like it's so easy to hide.
You've loved him for so very long,
You would think he could do no wrong.

Every day you would hope and pray,
That he would always stay this way.
He treated you like you should be treated,
You thought your life was finally completed.

You thought your love was growing true,
And then one day it was all so blue.
He started putting you down and it hurt,
You thought all you were to him was dirt.

He started ignoring you and you wondered why,
All you wanted to do was curl up and die.
You thought your relationship would never end,
But that was all so fake and pretend.

One night he was so sweet to you,
You thought all those things were maybe untrue,
Two days later he was back the same,
You thought you were the one to blame.

He thought the relationship was getting too serious
And that you had become a little too curious.
By this time you knew it wouldn't last,
All the nice things he said were in the past.

You thought that you would marry him some day,
But this time God wanted to get his way.
You wanted things back how they were before,
But you knew this couldn't happen anymore.

It was a Saturday night about ten o'clock,
You heard the news and it wasn't a shock.
You knew this was going to happen soon,
As you laid there and cried in the pale lit moon.

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  • Spiritual Soul
    July 17, 2008

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    aww thats so sad I hate it when love never works out, it's so tragic. This was a great poem though, you expressed your thoughts and feelings so well in this, thanks for your entry!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~

  • yellowjacket04
    July 16, 2008
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    This is a wonderful poem! I can feel the pain almost dripping off the screen. I am feeling the same way right now. I thought that I had met my "one true love" but it turned out that he doesn't feel the same way about me. And I like the rhyme scheme-- it seems to work in this poem. Wonderful job.