& I don’t think you know what you’ve been missing by not knowing me
& maybe if you gave it a try you’ll find that you’ve been missing quite a bit
& I’ll tell you my favorite band
& we’ll discover we like the same music
& have the same favorite colour
& we’ll become the best of friends
& I’ll fall in love with you
& you will love my best friend
& I’ll be heartbroken.. again
& I’ll eventually tell you how I feel
& you’ll stare at me as if I’ve lost my mind
& you’ll say ‘but we’re just friends’
& those four words will crush me
& I’ll never get over you
& I’ll say ‘I’ll always be here if you change your mind’
& you still go after her
& one day you’ll come crying to me telling me how she broke your heart
& you’ll remember me and my promise
& you’ll come back as if I’m just a rebound from a bad breakup
& I’ll take you in my arms because I still never got over you
& I know that you still see me as the best friend and not the girlfriend
& i'll push away those thoughts thinking that maybe he'll see who I am
& it shouldn't be an excuse but I do love you so much
& we'll grow older, still the best of friends
& now we're both 28
& you're getting married and I'm going to watch happily as you walk up the aisle
& now we're both 45
& you're getting a divorce because your wife cheated on you
& I'll comfort you and help you find a lawyer
& now we're both 65
& I'm dying from an unknown disease
& you comfort me in my pain
& i know what's causing my death, it's a broken heart
& not being able to have you
& on my deathbed i whisper 'I've always loved you'
& you'll reply 'but we're just friends; good friends but still friends'
& those four words plus 5 more will ruin me
& tomorrow I'll die
& you'll put flowers on my grave
& weep tears of shame because you didn't have the guts to say you loved me
& now I'm dead and you'll never have the chance ever again
& maybe you should've taken it back when we were both 16 and in love
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& ps. I love you
Author notes
random thoughts
not very organized or well written BUT this made me cry. the only poem i've ever written that has.
i know that's weird but it happened :S
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3. Write a goodbye poem to someone who has either died or moved away. Make me cry, and you will get a trophy, more than likely
In a list
A contest entry
- Abstract Options For Bizarre Poets xD by KyleBerg.
1750 points, ended October 8, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me cry, make my heart hurt, show me your pain by starving-to-survive.
1900 points, ended February 9, 42 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Shit! no wonder it made you cry! it made me cry! this is incredible. I am so so sorry. Your words have really touched me. i read this in some kind of trance like state! something took over me. So much pain, so much honesty. Just brilliant. Thank you so much for entering my contest. i am honoured. If you ever need to talk i am here for you
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*tears* This is done very well, your emotions are AMAZING in this poem. I loved every bit of it, thanks so much for entering!
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Wow! made me cry too
this is really emotional, and i LIKE the way its set out,, as random thoughts, it works well in my opinion. This is something I can kinda relate to. I love it! thanks for entering, best of luck
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wow. this was very beautifully written. i can relate to this. well done and good luck in the contest.
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Someone I know really needs to hear something like this, wish I could say it to their face.
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Awww, don't make me cry...ergghh! Haha, jl. Great piece, the form was repetitive, but it really wasn't annoying, each line was full of raw emotion and heartache as the story unravels. Thatnks for sharing!
Good luck in the contest!
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& i know what's causing my death, it's a broken heart
& not being able to have you
okay lol that's the only part that doesn't make sense
grammatically i mean
other than that its perfect
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i dont see the problem]
help?
lmfao i SUCK at grammar
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It made me cry too... excellent! Loved the emotion in this write, good job. =] I was a little ify on the '&' at the start of every line at first, but after finishing read the poem, it seemed to help tie it all together and make it flow nicely. Thanks for the entry.
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LOVE THIS!
i don't care if it's unorganized and such but it honestly has so much emotion in it!
and i love the "&" at the beginnign of each line, to me it makes it flow so well.
the p.s. part hit hard too.
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