It's so hard to have to fight for your love
when you never give me the chance to rise above
the hurt and all the pain of my torrid past.
If you don't work for it... this love won't last.
I try to give you my heart but you just throw it down
in your cesspool of lies as if you want me to drown
from the smell of the rejection that you've given me.
Still I love you so much that I don't want to be free.
My love is as strong as a sturdy piece of wood
and like a tree by the water it has grown and it has stood.
Author notes
I DO NOT CLAIM THE IMAGE DISPLAYED AS MY OWN.
A contest entry
- Photo prompt ~ # 99 ~ 10 poets 10 lines by Roaddog Wolf.
475 points, ended July 17, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Very nice write. I enjoyed the message of unrequited love within and could feel the pain in every word. Thanks for entering and good luck
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"If you don't work for it...this love won't last." True of love and of most endeavours.
"I love you somuch that I don't want to be free." Oh, dear. A strong, vivid write and I hope your HM does turn another colour.
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This is very beautifully written. I like the way you let your feelings flow. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thank you for the contest and the comment. There is a lot of feeling in this short, sad write. Thanks again and may GOD bless you.
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You grabbed the emotional attitude shook it up and let it out with a rush....yet there is the feeling of much love and pain within your lines the power i am feeling 'grown and it has stood'. What you see is what you help to create...Brilliant take on the prompt.
Good luck.
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Thank you for this helpful, hintful comment. It is alway great hearing from your peers. And you are absolutely correct...The heart of Kim was poured into this short write. The love, joy and pain is all there. Sometimes the joy just comes in loving someone even if you get no reciprocity. I like to say to people, "I love you and there aint nothing you can do about it". This is one of those instances. Thanks again...may GOD bless you!
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wow this is really a strongly penned feeling from deep within it has a tone of sad despair that I would the message reaches the one it is directed to and I hope they see it's importance, good write
Good luck in the contest and thank you for your entry
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THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE COMMENT. MAY GOD BLESS YOU!
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And yet...
another wonderful creation by the hands of an Artist of entrigueing spoken words filled with soul.
Indeed I have enjoyed this, good luck always.
ephiphany
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THANK YOU, MY SISTER. VERY ENCOURAGING FROM ONE OF THE BEST!
GOD BLESS YOU!
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