Just a simple girl
he thought as she sits silently beside him.
The breeze from the open pick-up truck window
blows her hair and over her face.
Relaxation had settled over her high-cheek bones
and in her smoky blue eyes.
Her legs are on the dashboard
covered in only a brief excuse for shorts.
She'd long since abandoned her glasses
as the sun sank itself deeper behind hills.
He knows she could fall asleep at any minute
as he takes her hand in his.
She stirs slowly from her daydreams.
Her eyes meet his as a smile creeps over her face.
He couldn't have known what she was
thinking as her eyes met his.
But he knows she's thinking of him.
There's that certain light in her eyes
and that secret smile on her lips.
But he couldn't know that she was falling for him.
She's too afraid that he'll walk away
or that she'll scare him and he won't understand.
Maybe she's simply not meant to be understood.
He turns back to the road.
And her eyes go back to the passing scenary.
That smile dissapears.
but the relaxed position brings her back to her dreams.
The wind goes through the open windows
and his music plays quietly.
M. M. O'Malley
Author notes
Midnight-Rose, I wanted to make you smile! =]]
we were driving around town and idk, it was so sweet.
he's amazing...but he has some commitment and emotion issues.
but we'll see.
let me know what you think.
iloveyou
WishMeAway--x
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wait i didn't say that right i meant its something everyone can relate to no matter your age or anything. you can love a guy so much and because your so afraid of whether he feels the same way he may never know
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wow i LOVED this. its just wow. and its something everyone can relate to whether real love or even just someone you walk down the hallway with every day at school. You describe it wonderfully, this is an amazing poem. great write
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awww this is so sweet, it's nice to read something beautiful and heartwarming. A lot of guys have commitment and emotional issues, some worse than others though, my ex had major ones.
I love how real this is, I hope things work for you two, as you really deserve it honey.
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beautiful imagery!!! really nice write!!! -
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thanks so much for the comment =]]
♥lovelove
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'He turns back to the road.
And her eyes go back to the passing scenary.
That smile dissapears.
but the relaxed position brings her back to her dreams.
The wind goes through the open windows
and his music plays quietly.'
I love that ending sweetie, it's so like sweet and awww.
This is so so beautiful sweetie, I hope everythings still really goody?
finalistt
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"Relaxation had settled over her high-cheek bones
and in her smoky blue eyes.
Her legs are on the dashboard
covered in only a brief excuse for shorts.
She'd long since abandoned her glasses
as the sun sank itself deeper behind hills.
He knows she could fall asleep at any minute
as he takes her hand in his.
She stirs slowly from her daydreams.
Her eyes meet his as a smile creeps over her face."
-Favorite fo sho
I love it.
Thanks for entering doll;
I was afraid I was going to have to close the contest because people suck, but now I think I'll leave it open :]
♥
-Mary
PS: I love driving around town;
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i hope you dont close this contest.
and idk, you're right driving around town, its simple and it just makes you realize you can handle that persons company in long silences. sometimes i think words are over used.
im so very happy you liked it!
lovelovelove
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sweet and beautiful
your words flowed from your heart and soul,I sincerely adored this so very much, to have love for only a moment is a fabulous and adoring happening,,bless you sweety,,,blessings of love,light,life and laughter...firestorm
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loving for only a brief moment is beautiful
but its never real.
it always dies.
our love died...very shortly after it was written.
but thank you.
it was a beautiful moment. I'll never forget it.
♥
lovelove
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who is this about hon? Its pretty much amazing thou love it.
But he knows she's thinking of him.
There's that certain light in her eyes
loves those lines!
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well im happy you liked it.
and it was written about zach awhile ago...like before my birthday, i just forgot about it but yeah...i found it.
we never really worked things out. so yeah...
the lines you liked--
"But he knows she's thinking of him.
There's that certain light in her eyes"
thats chad too...fuck. idk.
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oh okay.
I kind of figured those lines were about chad.
but yeah
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yeah...and it completely sucks.
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Well life likes to throw obsticales in the way to make you stronger and I know you will get through it all
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why, why, why does this remind me of nicole?
we've never driven somewhere [we're not even old enough to drive] but this just...makes me want to cry.
it's like june 4 all over again.
'She stirs slowly from her daydreams.
Her eyes meet his as a smile creeps over her face.'
it's how we used to wake up. it would be 8 am and the sheets on my futon were screwed up, but she always made me smile.
you've moved something in me.
i love your poetry because of that.
beautiful, beautiful job.
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thank you very much sweetie.
im happy you liked it.
and sometimes we need poetry to remind us of what has happened in the past to give us some comfort to see that other people go thru these things too.
thanks again hon.
♥.lovelove.
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