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I Am Thicker Than Water

 

 

 

 

made so many mistakes

that I don't know what to do,

or who to be for you.

my inner depths -

you'll never know

what fuels my fury

and I fear you'll see,

who the real me is.

memories, moments

and seconds of madness,

made our love affair--

never realised I was naive,

that you were a deceiver.

but no more, curtain call

now has reached my soul

and we're going to break out,

go our separate ways;

see blood is thicker than water

and though sometimes I'm thicker too,

I'm not prepared again to be your toy...

I'm over you.



 

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  • I LOVE THIS POEM.......i mean that this is just wow, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest. that is all i can think to say

  • I-Am-Custard
    July 17

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    I like this... I'd like a few capital letters in there, just for appearance's sake, but this is obviously just a taste thing and has no real effect on the read.
    I don't really like the last line, it lacks impact, and the poem builds up so nicely until that point. 'on this earth to do'... it's weak, it needs to be shorter, snappy, a slap in the face for the person the poem is aimed at.
    Thank you for entering. Feel free to edit until the closing date.
  • wow this is an amazing write, written with thought and strength. the metaphors are beautifully set out with ful and deep imagination and imagery. well done sweetie
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