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Shattered

With eyes sewn shut they try to show me the way,
but all they show me is that they're liars and fakes.

No matter how hard I try to forget what they said,
their words echo endlessly inside my head.

I won't surrender to what they want me to be,
I won't conform to be another in their corrupt fallacy.

There is an ember in me that only you can ignite,
to stop the pain and the hate that comes from their lies.

I've lost all sense of touch,I'm so cold and distant,
it's getting harder to fight the night,I'm so strained from resisting.

I've stumbled through life with a false sense of direction,
because of their deceit which caused a fatal infection that has broken
my heart and stolen my vision.

I'm looking for that stranger inside of me,
the only person that I've ever wanted to be.

And as I stand here now with my heart laid bare for all to see,
the only thing left in my way is a reflection of me....

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  • kel dog
    December 31, 2008
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    wow. great write. good luck in the comp.


  • trekkergirl
    September 19, 2008
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    wow this is soooo good too. Loved your imagery.


  • AbandonedAngel
    September 18, 2008
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    I love this poem!!!!!!!! I fit in with it so well and thanks for entering!


  • LittleAnn
    September 14, 2008

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    Hey there, I'm awfully sorry for not commenting earlier... I haven't been feeling well, and I still don't...
    Anyways, thanks for entering my contest!
    Keep on writing!
    Annie

  • piccola silver member
    August 30, 2008
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    I'm guessing at the prompt you chose...I hope I'm right. I like the idea of this and how the poem flowed so easily.

    "I'm looking for that stranger inside of me,
    the only person that I've ever wanted to be.

    And as I stand here now with my heart laid bare for all to see,
    the only thing left in my way is a reflection of me....

    love those lines.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    August 30, 2008

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    I am sorry but I have to disqualify you from the contest. My only rule was to not have your poem entered in another contest. Sorry.

    ♥
    whisper


  • DogFish silver member
    August 27, 2008
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    I've heard it said that if a holographic image is shatered, it isn't like a photo that's been cut into peices but, rather each shard becomes a new reproduction of the original...even if it be shatered, the human spirit will rise from the fight! There is always an ember there to ignite...


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    Nicely penned. Very strong emotions within your words. Neat read, thanks for entering and good luck


  • sora.
    August 7, 2008
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    this is great!
    i loved:
    "I'm looking for that stranger inside of me"
    =]


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    August 4, 2008
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    Doesn't meet 2oo word minimum.


  • HereComesTheSun
    July 30, 2008

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    the story

    the story here is so deep you actually could of added alot more but i love how you end it i get the struggle and the deceit people cause so you connected to your audience at least me great job


  • edit my world.
    July 29, 2008

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    i loved this...but i loved the last two lines especially. they speak clearly.

    good luck in your contests...even though i think this is beautiful with a capital B

    Dani♥

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