What happened to the great human beings
God's own dreams who would inherited everything?
The ones that were supposed to get along.
The one's who were supposed to sing God's song.
He gave to us water air food and life on earth.
He gave us nature and a place to live after birth.
What happened to the loving looks in our eyes?
The love that reflected God own love from inside?
Why do we shoot kill and bomb each other?
When all were born from the same earth mother.
none other i say none other, EARTH MOTHER.
Looks like we are trying to do each other in
being foes instead of friends.
The fact is wrong is wrong and right is right
and we could love or kill each other over night.
The truth is something all human beings were born
to know. This is not the way the story goes.
The day may come that we all will regret this,
instead of a hit,the future was miss.
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Please tell me what you think
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very good
the truths hurts. what can we do? take a honest look at ourselves and start with the nan in the mirror!!
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The fact that its all true only makes it more effective.
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Excellent, well worded, nothing but words of truth.
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This poem is beautiful. It really spoke to me and reminds me of exactly how I feel sometimes. Humans can be so horrible, I remember crying when I found out that the divorce rate hit %50. Anyway great job and I'm sorry I can't give you more than three applause for this but Kevin won't let me
Again great job I absolutely loved this poem
-Steve-
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I'm fine what this about?
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YOUR WORDS ARE SO TRUE!!!
So much I see has changed in this world we know today
I remember better and gentler times long ago when I was young. 
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Wow this really fits with the world, it's perfect, I do not think it could be any better, you have done an amazing job.
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I loved the rhyming scheme it caught my attention, I loved the story behind this, I think the title should be changed to "The Woes of Mother Earth" but ..I enjoyed it so much, Thank you so much for this masterpiece!!
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Excellent piece! Not only was it nicely written the content within was so true! As much as we hate the truth I agree we need to open our eyes to what is really happening to our world! Once again well done!
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I thought you approached the poem very well, there are other themes to explore for this type of poem, such as, violence, community, sharing and not hoarding, even though you mentioned kill and love, just some thoughts really enjoyed.
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A nice take on the reality of life amongst warring states. The poem flowed nicely and seemed to come naturally instead of forced. Bravo.
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i like this poem its so true i give you 3 applauds
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BRAVO BRAVO
NICE DELIVERY
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Well done
No punches pulled in this one just telling it as it is
well written,full of truths ,enjoyed reading it..George....
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I agree with your sentiments written here. We are all in for a shock when Mother Nature revolts against the depredations of man. We have so much to be grateful for, yet we choose to want much more. Shame on us.
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This a good piece, your rhyme doesn't sound forced, right up until
"Looks like we are trying to do each other in
being foes instead of friends. "
This sounds out of place.
Other than that, it flowed very well and you had no grammar issues or spelling mistakes.
except: hit,the -> hit, the
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Very thought provoking - and so true. We all came to be from the same creator, who-ever one believes that to be. And yet, we are all so divided at times in our beliefs, our way of life - like we have no unity at all. Does make one wonder how it will all end....
Great depth!
best wishes
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Great write! I love it. Definitely a thought provoking write. I did see some minor spelling errors.
~* Line 2: "God' own dreams who would inherited everything?" - add an s after the apostrophe in *God'* making it *God's*.
~* Line 4: "The one who were supposed to sing God's song." - add an s to the end of *one* making it *ones*.
~* Lines 6 & 10: "He gave us nature and a place to live after birth." "When all were born from the same earth mother." - both of these lines have an extra space between "us" and "nature" and between "were" and "born".
~* Line 14: "and we could love or kill each over night." - should "other" be between "each" and "over"?
~* Line 15: "The truth is something all human being were born" - add an s to the end of *being* making it *beings*.
Keep writing.
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Thank you I stand corrected
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thought povoking
this was good.i think the day has arrived you know the miss instead of hit. you write well,thanls for posting. -
2 typos I found
"Looks like we are trying to do each other in
being foes instead of fri(e)nds.
"The truth is something all human being(s) were born with."
Besides that.. I wish more people would follow this line of questioning and reasoning. The phonies are in charge and that's the truth.
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A great write.
I think most people would agree with your thoughts here.
In simple terms...
"The fact is wrong is wrong and right is right"
There just seem to be different opinions as to what is right and what is wrong !!!
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This would read better if you used "what happened" instead of "what happen." Other than that, I really like this poem. Shancy.
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I like this, even though it's been said many times before, I find I never lost interest in this piece, it 's an original in the way you see things. esp the last line.
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matricide?
humanity screwed mother earth
no loving looks in eyes
no great human beings left either
but still very nice write and at least you ask the right questions
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you are as much a part of they as I am or any one else is when you have all of the answers let us know.
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I like it. Reminds me somewhat of the first poem I ever wrote called "the question" which has a very similar theme. I often wonder why people do the horrible things they do to one another, myself. Simple but oh so strong. Excellent message. Beautiful write!
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The creator, The destroyer, The angels and The devils - all within. Let's see how long world would survive the conflict... The balance is delicate, the end near ... And on judgement day, we will all stand - whether heads held high , or whether with disappointment and tears ...
Let's do our part, Let's contribute our share - The answers lie within - Let's for a change, hear ...
Very nice write.. Very thoughtprovoking
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men have too much testoreone ,,thats why they are aggressive great write brooklyn...
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And it was so...
Everyone must come to realize...His commandment says love one another, this write flowed just enough to give that vision, why do we hurt one another...there is a song...Give us clean hands, give us pure hearts...Blessings
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What happen to the great human beings
God's dreams who inherited everything
The ones that were supposed to get along
Those who were supposed to sing God's song
a great piece this. Excellent indeed!
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Man this is so true, seems like its not any reall people left on earth anymore, I wonder what happened to them too, this is a deep one rite here good work
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Yeah, people do a lot of bad things, why, why, why?
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I have always wanted to know the answer to this.
very thought provoking with a powerful message.
excellent
God bless my friend...
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This is excellent. You bring about a very true message that should be passed on. I only can wish that more people read this.
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Hi
Thank you Zodiac
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