Amera the Queen of the Elves of the night
In armour of silver and steel
Led hundreds of warriors into the fight
And brandished a sword named Aureel
When the trolls from the hills are attacking again
Amera must fight in defence of her men
Her standard is born by the bravest of knights
Sir Titus the teller of tales
Who follows her into the fiercest of fights
Then sings her a song about Wales
The trolls of the hills are all ugly and old
And come to the towns to steal women and gold
Eusebius too is an elf with a lance
Whose glories are sung in the skies
Amera beside him bears charms to entrance
With magic in her battle cries
The trolls of the hills are all heavy and slow
And live in the caverns and chasms below
MJ rode on horseback from lands filled with ice
His Queen has commanded his sword
When called by Amera he'll never think twice
Amera's his sovereign Lord
The trolls of the hills come alive every night
To eat all the babies then learn how to write
Brave Johnny her father has wisdom and age
And carries a war-axe and mace
The tales of his derring-do leap from the page
His Queen always saves him a place
The trolls of the hills are not easily slain
Their skin is like leather, they never feel pain
Amera asked Lyndon along for the game
The seamer has weapons to throw
He's spent all his lifetime acquiring his name
And has many talents to show
The trolls of the hills are now screaming in fright
Amera is forcing them into the light
Pure Thought is a warrior cunning and brave
Who'll follow his Queen to the end
He'll never give up while there's lives he can save
Amera is proud he's her friend
The trolls of the hills are now ready to run
And strong Elven warriors set about fun
With Mairi beside her a Scottish Princess
Who'll argue and fight with the best
She's never discovered in laces and dress
And seldom or never impressed
The Trolls of the hills are now firmly replaced
When the Queen rides to battle they're always disgraced
Amera the Queen of the Elves of the day
Is dressed up to dazzle her men
The hundreds of Elves that she's met on her way
Are captured by Beauty again
The Trolls of the hills are still sure they have won
The Queen's stuck in Florida dodging the sun!
Author notes
Amera wrote a beautiful poem featuring me as a six headed dragon so since no good deed should go unpunished I wrote this...
The careful amongst you can spot quite a few AP poets in Amera's army I'll come back later and provide links to their pages but thought it would be fun to let you find them yourselves for a while.
Since it is for Amera I better say something about the form. I needed something she has never written, not an easy task, and something that no-one else on AP is likely to have written either. I have gone for an "ode" rhymed in sixaines rhymed ababcc (Shakespeare used this in Venus and Adonis and it has recurred many times since) but I haven't gone for iambics the a and c lines are in tetrameter and the the b lines in termeter but the individual feet are mostly amphibrachs (diDUMdi) with lines terminating in iambs, but I have not checked that this is rigourously enforced.
I hope that everyone named is happy to be in here I admire you all!
In a list
A contest entry
- Elves, Forests, Fantasy! by PerVirtuous.
3000 points, ended August 7, 38 entries
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Awesome!!!!
Good luck on the contest!
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I think this is superb! It only took me the 1st stanza to catch the rhyme scheme
I can see why this is in the judge's preliminary picks
This is an awesome little fun filled fantasy.Thank you for sharing this with us and best of luck to you in the contest. This is a winner in my eyes.
Don
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Lovely
Thank you for entering, this is exactly the type of thing i've been looking for. I enjoyed it very much! Great poem!
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To be the King of such a Queen is a pleasure you shall never know, as I cannot do it justice in words. To be able to sit home and relax with a Brandy as she fights the battles is a wonderful feeling. Of course, should we ever find a worthy opponent, I would lead the battle. But when it comes to cleaning up a few trolls, or putting an Englishman in his place, I let her have the fun. This poem bounced along with a nice meter. You left out a lot of people, but I suppose this taxed you plenty as it is. The rhyming was fairly good. I give it three bunnies.
. Rewarded 8
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My intimidating broad sword 'Aurora' is sharp, ever ready and always eager to draw filthy troll blood! Loved this intriguing penning and it was an honor.
Love and peace always,
The mighty northern knight, MJ.
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You tell this like a story. I enjoyed that. It was fun to read and left me with a smile on my face. I wasn't sure if this was all a metaphor for something or not until I read your explanation. That's pretty cool. I have nothing really critical to say, but maybe next time. Hahah.
. Rewarded 6
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I enjoyed this poem alot...had fun , made me smile,great battle though, reading through each line and analysing the meaning made it become real to me.Fantastic write and yup, i really did enjoy it!
. Rewarded 4
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Trolls, huh? I am always in awe of poets who can maintain a form so well that it seems effortless!!
Admirable effort!
"The Trolls of the hills are still sure they have won
The Queen's stuck in Florida dodging the sun!"
I found these lines really funny!!
The absence of a queen; who is trying to protect herself foolhardily from the Florida sun, being the reason for success in battle is kind of quirky! 
Nice one!
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Lilting
Wonderful battle of Elves and Trolls, whatever your inspiration was. The names and characteristics are useful in the "story", even if they're just fiction to most readers. After living in Florida for a while, I really appreciated the last lines about the Troll trying to avoid the sun there. Fun Write!
. Rewarded 6
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Whoever it was written for, it was a nice story and I loved the meter. You always seem to get it just right. Pen on fellow poet...
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another good one
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wow wonderful story I loved the following lines
Her standard is born by the bravest of knights
Sir Titus the teller of tales Who follows her into the fiercest of fights Then sings her a song about Wales To eat all the babies then learn how to writeThe Trolls of the hills are still sure they have won
The Queen's stuck in Florida dodging the sun!
. Rewarded 6
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Touche'... and that you found one that amera herself hasn't done, is impressive in itself. Great story.
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"With Mairi beside her a Scottish Princess
Who'll argue and fight with the best
She's never discovered in laces and dress
And seldom or never impressed"
Thanks for including me here. An ex of mine calls me "Literal Mary", which gives you some insight into why I argue. You're right about the dresses, but my combat pants'll do for this battle.
OK, as far as this poem is concerned, you really pulled the pin out before you threw it. Not bad!
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Delightful
This was just wonderful. There were a few places where I felt like I had to force the meter, instead of it coming naturally, but I understand that meter and rhyme are hard. Anyway, I very much enjoyed your poem. Thank you
. Rewarded 4
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Beautiful fantasy piece peopled with our AP warriors! Great format and a lovely story with a humorous ending. Tricky piece of work but you have done it with grace and ease. Kudos!
. Rewarded 4
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This was OMG .AWESOME!
I galloped through the whole thing, not once did I have to stop and regroup. This was so amazing, I bet God himself will bookmark this one, I know I am, I did Amera's as well, to have the complete set. YAY!
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I can see a few names I have come across but not all of them, are you, cricketjeff, the troll?
It is areally good poem I love the galloping feel to it and I'll come back to see when you put all the names there.
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I have goosebumps!!! Poetry doesn't do that to me, lol. I love this poem - A LOT! Very beautiful, and the fact that you wrote it for a friend is touching and wonderful! I LOVE IT!!!!
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This is a nice poem and a very complex rhyme. I liked it from beginning to end. The fantasy imagery is well done, and the story is well told.
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Very interesting read here
A very good style and yes quitwe a story indeed
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hahaha RPG style poem! made me laugh. loved it.
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I started reading this with a grin on my face, the grin became a smile and the smile broke into laughter of pure joy. This is brilliant, well composed and pure entertainment. I think your effort is massive and the way you incorporated my friends is fantastic! Thank you so much Jeff!
This deserves gold:
Love,
Amera♥
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I thought of doing your whole favourites list, but I ran out of ideas for the troll
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Oh, this IS rich, indeed! A huge, huge smile here, a wonderful, tale told by the deft hand of a sly sage thaumaturge most adept in the antediluvian art of poetry... bravo... bravo... bravo...
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was great fun to write, I could have done about 20 more stanzas but enough is enough
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I'm not sure whether to call this a saga or a story, but whatever it is, it's Bloody Good!!!!
A great tale involving many of AP's finest and they should love it.
Well done
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