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thirty love

                    i    saw
you standing there
                    with everything i could do to
                       
                                      stop myself
      from    completely    attacking  you
                                                  with every color of my love


why should i be holding it back?

Author notes

i know the title sucks.
i'll fix it.

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  • petrichor
    July 21, 2008

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    I like this, but it seems completely cliche. I don't know what else you could actually put. But the middle just reads as cute, but cliche. Although I adore 'colour of my love'

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