never minds
needles-
antiseptic sting
proof
she can bleed
like women fully-
round
at birth;
asleep
in her absent
pagan land,
waiting for another
midwife, to say
she
is done.
Author notes
Word Count: 30
Edits: 3
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A contest entry
- 30 words... by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended July 17, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Very nice. Can't really relate to the birthing process, but the emotion is definitely tangible and excellently presented.
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I so wish I could write like this, 30 words of genius.
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if anyone can maintain a level of quality with 30 words it would be you
really like this
best wishes
peace and hugs
Muddy
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Love that you managed this in 30 words without it feeling choppy. It reads smooth..hopeful even, though if I am wrong about that, feel free to correct me.
I never have anything to say after going to the doctor. I get numb in the head, my eyes glaze over, bit like going to the mall for me
but ..i digress..
Perfectly succinct.
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yup
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There is power in short writes, isn't there. This is proof. wowsa.
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