Its been so long,
since i felt this way.
Way back then,
on that fateful day.
My whole world crashed,
i wanted to end my life.
My heart was broken,
my eyes continuously cried.
I wanted to start over,
thought i was okay.
Longing for a new life,
another carefree day.
But you came back,
into my sight.
Now i know what i want,
and i won't give up without a fight.
A contest entry
- Breakups by slippingofftheedge.
300 points, ended August 22, 2008, 32 entries
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Thanks
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Go gettem...
You captured that emotionl roller coaster that someone can make our hearts feel...awesome.
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hahas, thanks
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just amazing put great flow rymes and everything else
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Thanks
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liked the flow the rhymes and of course the story...
dont give up!
nice poem
Shuberth
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hahas, thanks?
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Go get him / her tiger....
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Thanks
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lovely short and inspiring, thanks and good luck in my contest
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Thanks
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love the last two lines
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Thank you, you're quite good too!!
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I like your style... you have nice flow and great timing with your rhymes... nice talent... your friend in poetry.... JackReed3...
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thanks
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never give up on what you believe in....never stop fighting for what you want.....good characteristics to have in life, and this piece captured those thoughts well
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thanks xD
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Good
I liked this poem of yours because i can feel you pain.I have been through things that made me feel the same.DON'T GIVE UP! Good Job!
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