When the earth was not known,
No Sun was there in the sky,
Air was missing, where did I exist?
Since nothing can come from zero
And I am very much here now,
At yore, then, I must have been there.
Oh Lord! This thought pounds me,
Will You please tell me the truth?
How did I exist?
A lovely voice comes, It says -
‘You are always there my son,
Today may be in one form
And tomorrow in another.
You and I are the same
Difference is only in manifestation
The more you become pure
The nearer you come to Me’.
I gain my consciousness,
Try to feel Him in me,
Folding hands I pray make me Yours.
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A contest entry
- Wanted: Free Verse rich in metaphor by BellaD.
950 points, ended August 1, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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great words of wisdom and hopes to come!! great write..thank you very much! ♥ good luck to you!
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well done on this magical little poem. a great write. very interesting and imaginitive. well done. emmy
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A nice conversation. I like it. Thanks for sharing this with us. And thanks for entering it into my contest. You write a simple but good conversation here. Thanks again. -
Absolutely wonderful poem.. And, it very beautifully touches upon the most difficult question of all times..
Though not sure if this relates to the theme of the contest, still, a wonderful poem, thanks for sharing !
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And yet we did exist, for he knew us even before were conceived in our mothers womb
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this was a very nice poem that raises a common question. Thanks for enetring it into my contest, though it didn't exactly fit with the theme.
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Ah, very well done. So pure and simple. Thank you ever so much for sharing, this poem must be read by all.
Thank you for entering and best of luck to you.
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The imagery in this is awesome. Thank you so much for sharing.
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I like the feelings and the purity in this poem. The softness of felling God is simply stunning as captured by this poem.
The length was good too. Good luck in the contest!!
loveees,
transit~
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wow!
The first entry, and it is beautiful! i love the purity of this poem! it was simple yet it held such deep meaning! it was a very spiritual write! A lovely way to express this feeling! It lifted my spirits, and the meaning behind this poem is perfectly put into words! thank you so much for this lovely write, much appreciated! keep penning!
~Beauty of silence
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wow. one of the earliest pieces and you have set tha standards really high. great work here, loved it loads. your style was awesome and the meaning behind was expressed very well. great work.
we wish you loads of luck
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beautiful spiritual poem
i was truly touched by this heartfelt prayer and the strength beneath it shining through.
"You and I are the same
Difference is only in manifestation"
this really captivated me. thanks for this amazing write and best of luck -X
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This is very beautiful! Such pure spirituality in your lines. I particularly like "Oh Lord! This thought pounds me,
Will You please tell me the truth?"
So lovingly shows the relationship to be gained through prayer. Thank you for this lovely entry.
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"Since nothing can come from zero"...not even this prayer-poetry...this comes from a very strong faith, grounded in HIM. Such certitude you write here, my friend, it is moving and inspirational. Thanks for the writing and sharing of it here. Best wishes in the contest. Peace always, Rhonda
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It is my immense pleasure. Bliss!
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