Is it wrong for me to want this
To feel again within my heart
Open it let someone in
Fall in love, find happiness
Is it too soon for me trust yet
To much for me to take
Has my heart healed enough
Is that a chance that I can take
I want so much to feel you
To have your hand in mine
Watch a smile light your face
See the love within your eyes
I need to know its okay
That you can understand
If I should feel uncertain
That we can take it slow
Author notes
option picture credit: couple by nesuhbabyyy
A contest entry
- --}} Semi Quickie {{-- by Noir mariposa...x.
300 points, ended July 18, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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That is such a dilemma for people. You have the balance just right and have made it so clear how someone worries and questions feelings when you want to love again.
Sheila
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It ends as though a promise is sealed with love.
Tour poem drips with every emotional intent to move the readers into falling in love and finding happiness. (Which of course I have felt with just reading this piece)
I particularly know what you're trying to say. Love can sometimes feel so right and can feel so wrong both at the same time. ^^, Confusing huh?
But over all... wonderful job here.
blessed be
Blanche
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Awww so tender and moving..
You have the reader pondering with you on what must be a very universal experience for many, the question of trusting again after being hurt in love... but trust being the basis of love and of all relationships must prevail for true love to grow from the seed planted.
Live, love and trust and hope for the best meanwhile this is beautifullly penned and so touchingly tender and highly empathic.
Love it, done that, still wearing the T shirt of past scars, well done on this my friend!
Good luck in all of your contests hope you win Gold in them
all!
Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
Kaz.
Kazytc XX
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The poems smells a love. But with doubts
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"Is it wrong for me to want this To feel again within my heart. Open it let someone in .Fall in love, find happiness" Not at all..I've been going through the same thoughts as "he" has also.. what's amazing is that when it's mustual you both know it. It's never wrong to feel that again!.. Lovely!!
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Awwww I think it sometimes can be to soon to love again, but a heart won't let anyone enter than....but if your heart is ready to let anyone in there is no reason why you shouldn't try to love again..is there????
I loved this, it's a path a lot of people walk on these day's.....
XXJeannette
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"Is it too soon for me trust yet
To much for me to take
Has my heart healed enough
Is that a chances that I can take"
This was so sad and unfortunately I can relate too it...
Few things I'll pick at;
"Is that a chances that I can take" << minus the extra "s" on the end of chance:
and I did ask for prompt in the AN notes.
Other than that; Very well done.
Thank you for entering
Claire x
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