I leave your house,
So late at night.
I can't believe,
We just had a fight.
You told me that you love me,
I said 'I love you too.'
But, with all of this misfortune,
How can that be true?
As I'm walking home, I think,
We really shouldn't fight.
I call but we start up again.
I scream 'Whatever!' and 'Good night!'
I walked the rest of the way home,
Looking at my feet.
I get home, turn the TV on...
My heart skipps a beat...
The news report,
Is outside your door.
It's a suicide...
Your blood is on the floor.
This can't be happening,
It isn't true!
Why did you leave me?
I said I LOVE YOU!
You're dead...gone,
'Cause I said stupid things.
Not breathing, I stand numb,
Not caring the phone rings.
"I don't love you!
I never will!"
Was all it took,
For your blood to spill.
I'm at your wake,
With our other peers.
I give you one last kiss,
And burst into tears.
Your lips are cold,
Cold as can be.
And, I can't stop thinking...
This is all because of me
Author notes
Not very good...whatever. I wrote it three years ago. =/
AN: Tears-You-Bleed [without the hyphens]
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heartbreaking
This was heartbreaking, truly....
The verse, "Your lips are cold,
Cold as can be.
And, I can't stop thinking...
This is all because of me "
brought tears to my eyes.
Even though it was unrealistic [because the tv cameras wouldnt have been there; they tend not to photoshoot/film suicides], it was still very hard hitting, and impactive! Best wishes in the contest
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Such a strong powerful wright. it was heart wrenchingly painful to read this. keep up the great work. i wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering. my favorite lines are:
"I get home, turn the TV on...
My heart skipps a beat...
The news report,
Is outside your door.
It's a suicide...
Your blood is on the floor."
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The story you told wasn't the strongest or the most unique but your poetic ability is clear. I thought the poem flowed really well and the rhyme didn't feel too forced. I liked the ending a lot as it really showed how we tend to blame ourselves a lot, a sometimes self destructive part of human nature. x
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love it
Wow its amazing i love it!!! -
this is good...
well done!!
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