it's a half burned
cigarette, the part
enjoyed most
a filthy habit,
one I can't break,
ash all I have
in the pores of skin
I reach for it
over and again,
preferring lingering death
of subtle addictions
you burn like wood,
scarred, torn;
buried in bark
and underneath,
sap, the soft pliable kind,
wrapping fingers around,
feel it sink into my palm
sweet,
tender to the tongue,
an aftertaste
of colored bulbs
dipped in soil
fine tobacco leaves
I inhaled to spit you up,
regurgitation akin to love
allow me to swallow you
in the smoke
Author notes
he's an addiction what can I tell you?
A contest entry
- The Essence Of Love by vaseline.
510 points, ended August 1, 10 entries
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i understand the addiction to smokes haha andd it can very well be compared to love. this is beautifully written. its warm, but not tacky warmth
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You could call him Nikko for short...
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...what a metaphor!
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"the part
enjoyed most"
LMAO, interesting in how it relates to a cigarette (absolutely disgusting, but tasty as a metaphor)
"preferring lingering death of subtle addictions"
Nice. Really nice.
"buried in bark"
I likey.
"an after taste of colored bulbs dipped in soil"
AWESOME imagery and just...very cool. Makes me think deeper about the meaning. Should be 'aftertaste' though...since it's one word. (:
"I inhaled to spit you up
Yowza. I like.
"allow me to swallow you in the smoke"
Full-blown and wonderful...
As for your AN...well, no comment apart from this one. (:
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He's an addiction just like smoking...and a hard habit to break....yet you love this habit and how can you turn it a loose.....excellent write...
novy
Especially a handsome man......
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being a smoker, among other things, I can completely relate to the addiction of things/people/ etc. Well said.
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I could live comfortably without my cigarettes in some asylum somewhere...lol. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Thanks for your comment my long and dear friend.
This poem is outstanding... so very descriptive, and powerful imagery to boot. I love it. ~ Kerri
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