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I finally decided
to turn my feet around
back-stepping down roads
that once were
enchanted by childhood

I discovered
I didn't miss home

just who I was


then

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  • notorious
    July 16, 2008
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    Gah, I love this!!! (I'm waiting for your muse to give me a really crappy poem, but I guess that never will happen. )

    "back-stepping"
    Love this.

    "enchanted by childhood"
    Love this even more...

    "Just who I was
    then"
    Wow, the separation of 'then' into a new line makes SUCH an impact...this is wonderfully written, and best of luck in the contest (:

  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    July 16, 2008

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    wow, amazing the way it is set out and the phrasing tht has been usedd really speaks on a level and makes the reader think about who they are. well done

  • Dishy
    July 16, 2008
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    Good

    I liked this as it makes you think .


  • Kari gold member
    July 16, 2008

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    Sometimes being away can help discover whom you really are. Taking risks in life really help develop the character inside.