Tears,
pour quickly
into the empty abyss
of your blackened, cold heart which cannot be filled just like a sieve.
[I am fading.]
Burn me,
and melt me down
like a piece of scrap metal that almost became a coin.
[Bent and twisted out of shape I’m thrown away.]
fragile bones,
like glass will break under the pressure
of your dishonesty.
[I don’t know who I’ve become.]
Author notes
option 7: new form
In a list
A contest entry
- - 7 Fantastic Options - by xxRainbowDawnxx.
1050 points, ended July 25, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dramatic and emotionally charged Thank you for entering this was good
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Burn me,
and melt me down
like a piece of scrap metal that almost became a coin.
[Bent and twisted out of shape I’m thrown away.]
its amazing how u used such innovative ideas even when you were restricted to the form
youre a genius emu -
Awesomely wrote, stuck to the lines so well! Definately expressive & meaningful. I know how this feels so much and the raw emotions break my heart, further than it already has been. Definately a keeper, strong and amazingly done! x
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thanks so much for the comment & the gold & the fav add haha
xx.<3
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fragile bones,
like glass will break under the pressure
of your dishonesty.
[I don’t know who I’ve become.]
love it.
& you stuck to the form so well!
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i love your form
lolll
i try to make witty remarks but fail lmfao. -
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LMAOOO i just got that
ahahah
wow.
i miss you.
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