When a person speaks
we try to take the time
and digest the words
that are shoved down
our meaningless empty throats
Sometimes we hope & pray
that things won't get any worst
but it always does
turning are insides into mush
and bullshit lies
Through it all
we like to believe
or think
that maybe all that hard work
finally paid off
But I doubt there are any rainbows
in any of these clouded rain skies
so sorry if I offended you
if I rained on your parade
I'm cynical but I try to be polite
Author notes
I'm not cynical...just realistic
and if you know me well...you'll find this piece amusing
Any advice would be lovely?
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Very well penned.
The first stanza is great. Every word in it perfect.
and your right you cant be a cynic, because a cynic wouldn't think their views were overly negative and therefor wouldn't find themselves cynical
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i love it!
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Honestly, some folks just can't take a comment. The whole idea of debate is to defend your belief. If you do it well enough (with style or finesse) then in your argument, you can win others over. However, in this day and age, most of us are too cocky (except me, I'm too perfect) to admit any wrong doings/mistakes or room for growth. Personally, I learned that a comment or critique is usally to improve me (but once again, not only am I perfect, I'm sexy but that's part of being perfect so not only am I intelligent, I'm perfectly sexy AND intelligent.)
Well done, sister. Write on. One.
Dez
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soooo true. I think people get so offended, they don't know what to do with themselves. And then when someone tries to give them a critique they get so defensive.
I need to grow up...because I'll be damn if I am the same person at age 30!
Thanks for the comment!
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holy crap. I love you. Seriously. I love your poems...You're so...poetic. Ha ha is that dumb? it might be. This is totally mean...cept my cynical side gets really mean sometimes ha ha.
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wow thanks! no its not dumb. I am glad you like the poetry...I have to check yours out
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loved it b
its very true and and very real
great write alltogether lots of love
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Excellent piece! One thing to point out though:
In the first stanza, 5th sentence, you use the word "Are". Do you mean "Our?"
Other than that, this was beautifully written. I LOVE the ending.
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Thanks so much for catching that!
Glad you liked it
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