we each dance to our own drum
playing a different tune
hearing something unique
from the same piece of music
what we share with others
is what we offer to the orchestra
all playing together
give it the sound that pleases
traipsing through the wild
in footsteps of those who led
now we follow behind
all part of the kingdom of life
Author notes
picture prompt: African Sonata by Vladimir Kush
A contest entry
- Abstract and Beautiful......Vladimir Kush Inspired by jcat.
1500 points, ended July 17, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Love the prompt!
I wished that I had gotten a try at it. This orchestra of nature echoes in rich sounds of life and meaning.
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lovely write for the prompt . . liked "hearing something unique" and "all part aof the kingdom of life" . . congrats on the bronze
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Not implicated
in this poem is the thought that we often forget the contribution we make to what otherwise would have been a beautiful 'synchronized' orchestral sound, had it not been for 'my greed for individuality'. A lesson read and learnt from the 'positive' of your poem to take with me today. I have always enjoyed the depth of simplicity in which you portray meaning through your poems. A cherished friend from the start of my journey on AP. A bunch of
s to you my friend. Frans
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I love the natural feel to this, the flow is effortless, and the pace is perfect, imagery and title is perfect, a very nice take upon the picture, with a warming message laced through out the poem.
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I loved the idea behind this poem. We all have something unique to offer and the blending of all our talents leads to an incredible symphony. Congratulations on your trophy. Peace, Liz
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Most deserving of a trophy. Your flow and meter are done with seeming ease. Congratulations on the win. Pen on...
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Congrats on the bronze trophy. We shuld all learn to play together. We are all God's creatures.
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Thank you grannyeri for sharing this lovely poem with us. I had read it prior to today. I can't believe I hadn't left a comment. Keep up the good writing.
Naish Maeno, my friend.
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This is a beautiful piece of work. I enjoyed reading it. Parts of the poem were a bit awkward, they didn't flow very well, but all in all it's a beautiful poem.
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Interesting juxtaposition of individuality, unity, and deference in the three stanzas. Thanks for adding traipsing to my vocabulary--that's a great word.
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What a cool picture! I loved your use of the word 'traipsing.' The message of this piece is very strong and personal (to me at least) and I am glad to have read this piece.
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A very interesting submission from you G. Very true how we all dance to our own drum... as demonstrated by an A.P. contest with a single prompt and everybody has their own unique take. But, ultimately, we are all following those who followed those who followed someone else!
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I love the picture. Great poem too
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I really liked this piece - it brought a sense of tranquility and peace to the picture, while maintaining the musical theme
Congratulations on the bronze trophy!
Keep writing
Polly
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It is an incredible picture to write a poem about but you covered it in the first verse, all very true.
we are allpart of the kingdom.
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Nice one
interesting picture with an interesting poem -
wonderful take on the prompt!
Beautiful words also
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This is beautiful-- I love the idea behind it, and the way you took the picture prompt. I wish you could expand this with more images. The orchestra metaphor really gets to the heart of what you're trying to say, I think. Thank you for sharing.
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I like the pic. It's almost Salvadore Dali, but with an ethnic twist. I like the ideaology of an orchestra...we creatures all do make some cacophony. Rarely in tune. And alot of abrasive screaming.
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Effective use of dentives in the opening lines really encapsulate the beating of the drum. The use of language throughout also helps in both making me envisage and hear the sounds of the elephants marching. Nicely evocative write, thanks for sharing, keep up the great work, I did like this.
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Hi, lovely poem, it would be lovely if we all made the effort to play in tune,congratulations on your trophy, hugs Di
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good oem
Great poem, but I would spend momey to go to THAT comcert!
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Ahh......Music, the universal language....... we are all players in life's orchestra. Life is pleasent to the ears, and this was a pleasurable read.
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hey granny, i know its been a while, but i'm back... .for now, i don't even know if i've read any of your poetry but this is lovely, the thought of it is like a song.
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The first stanza is exactly right, everyone gets something different from one song, no matter what it seems.
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very nice!
it was kind of melodic![[if you know what i mean]] and your overall flow and rhythm shocked me till the very end. it was simple yet complex. this is an awesome peice of art!
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harmony
Yes it would be lovely if we could all live in harmony with each other and with nature, whilst each going about it in our unique ways. i wonder if that will ever happen?
All the very best in the contest.
best wishes,
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Hey guess what? You were selected for our reaching out. I like the picture. I think I have a whole procession. Niashi ma eno from all your family left some love on your page.
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This was truly lovely, congratulations on your trophy
Every stanza had its own voice, and they melodied perfectly. Thank you for sharing.
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A beautiful poem and interesting picture! It speaks such truth, especially "hearing something unique from the same piece of music" and "now we follow behind / all part of the kingdom of life"...really wonderful. Congrats on the Bronze, it was well earned!
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Brilliantly Written
i really love this poem. even though it's short it brings a messages and really makes me think that we all have something wonderful that we can contribute to the world. Thank you for sharing this. -
Love the picture. What you write is very true. Thanks for contributing this wonderful piece.
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Well...
What a unique dance, you've danced with this picture prompt. I simply loved it, beauty and wisdom, what more could we expect. Congratulations for your trophy.
As always, was a real pleasure reading you!
Ron
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i love the picture, first off, and I loved how you used it to inspire such a wonderful poem. The length was very short, and you could probably have done a lot more with it, but you have done your work in such a way that you don't need to. This stayed very true to the theme of not only the art, but what the contest mandated. I liked the form, and the little quirks that made the poem all the better, and made it more your own, like not using a single capitolization, or any other form of punctuation through the whole piece. This was a brilliant piece, and I thank you for sharing this with all of us. Congratulations on your placing in the contest ^_^
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WOW... I would hate to see what silver and gold wrote.. I loved these lines...
we each dance to our own drum
playing a different tune
hearing something unique
from the same piece of music
what we share with others
is what we offer to the orchestra
all playing together
AWE...well I liked the whole thing
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Awsome!
What a stunning write! You have caused me to look at our individuality vs. our own contribution to the greater good of all. The contrast and the interlacing of the same makes a good study, food for thought. Niaish for sharing this thoughtful and well structured write.
Niaish Ma eno from all your children~ is leaving love on your page
Brother Gray Elk
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A very lovely entry......Thank you for entering
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BREATH TAKING
your words of wisdom flow softly across the page and like you said"what we share with others is what we offer to the orchestra of life"
Niaish Ma eno from all your children~ is leaving love on your page this week*hug*
niaish so much for sharing such beauty with us all:f:f:f:f
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Wow, that's so beautiful and inspiring!
You really captured this picture wonderfully
with your words here my friend. Always a
pleasure to read you and good luck to you
with this one! Thanks a lot for sharing it
with us all here!
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Wow
That's so adorable. It's a very good piece indeed. I mean looking at the poetry aspect. You've written it well. The flow,Rhyming and Rhythem was amazing.
Then looking at the idea, the topic. I feel it's been persecuted well and i really enjoyed that thought. The picture is GREAT, btw.
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