"put it in my ass" she said
while leaning forward on her elbows
with her shaved and showered skin
inviting rise...
and so I spread her whole
exchanging hot saliva
for the cold reality
that loneliness had
soiled my bed and brief
A contest entry
- Give it to me! by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended August 1, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I hadn't realized this was over.
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Wow at the opening, the first couple lines were really, really strong. And the last three lines... such a twist, and so nicely worded. Good work
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omg
this was realy wild
a wet dream
lol
great work
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i really doubt i need to tell you what i think of this... lol the ending is slightly sad but the rest makes up for it. damn you're good...
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Holy Mother of all things Erotic!!!
*wipes brow* ... FANTASTIC!!!
Nothing else to say
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Funny thing is I feel cheated because I've never actually had a wet dream... lol
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really? That sucks!!!!! I've had heaps! lmao!
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I don't think this needs a comment for I have the image burning in my head! C
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Um... That would be a comment. lol
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