Failure can never bring you down
love will always find you
but you cant find love if you mope around
please savi get off the ground
sticks and stones cant break your bones
if you hold your self above them
words and knives may come in fives
but wont touch you if you say fuck them
dont feel so down someone cares
cares enough to write these words
every word they all speak
shows how much they care
the points are pointless
your safety is why
they all write this
so please dont cry
Savi please dont cry
We Care
A contest entry
- Im emo, im depressed, and suicidal..make me happy by SaviDropKick.Oi..
450 points, ended August 2, 2008, 15 entries
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Comments
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Pretty Damn Good
This poem has a well developed structure and rhyme scheme. This scheme changes in the third stanza, but it actually makes sense that way. It's a bit like your speaking that part out of context...like from behind the poem itself. I really enjoyed this poem, and I like the style you employ here. Keep it up, Other Dark!
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wow
thanks so much!!!
love,
Rayne(Savi) -
Good write here
So true what you speak of here so true indeed
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