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Spring

Of silent, frozen wintry nights

the seeds sleep

in their hibernating hearths,

tombs of dormant thoughts,

hearts so cold and no taste of light,

buried without a promise

this barrenness, this hopeless icy life

will ever rise to know

when drifts don't hold dominion

over their world.

 

But life ascends in rays that thaw

awakened in the thorn or bloom

beset by the fated wand of transition.

 

Spring besets the cocoon release

Lepidoptera rises to face its days,

eyes always reflection the genesis.

 

Lips having new language

thistle or rose dialect

blooms.

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Prompt: metamorphosis

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  • BellaD
    July 23, 2008

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    Ilove where you've taken the prompt and how beautiful your verse is. Lovely imagery and personification. Question: in last line of next to last stanza, should reflection be reflect? I'm not reading this smoothly as is. Thank you for a beautiful entry.


    • penman gold member
      July 23, 2008
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment. I did edit the reflection word.


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 15, 2008

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    Excellent take on the prompt and I believe this composition contains all, if not more, in its metaphoric content that Bella has requested--
    A most beautiful piece!


  • StarEyes
    July 15, 2008

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    Wow! My brother, this is beyond words! I love the images you paint with these words! Fantastic!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta