Why so many have to disgrace?
Why not love all the human race?
I'd like so very much to see this passion,
even if it's not my normal fashion.
My mind might as well be infinite.
But sadly half the time the lightulb isn't always lit.
Ever wish that you had feathers?
Or wish to ban the use of leathers?
My mind can be as mysterious as the sky.
Or attention-span the length of a dragonfly.
I would like for everyone to have a heart,
or at least appreciate a work of art.
Can't you send some possitive affliction
to stop all of my crazy random addictions?
I wasn't sure what this word meant
when you posted irreverent.
Oh well, I'll find out later
because for now it seems,
I still must use the words
phantom and dreams.
Author notes
Rainbows Have Elbows Of Golden French Frys
A contest entry
- Word Bank - Flexible Rules (Visit, Ye Who Be The Bravest Hearts And Pancakes) by Asa.Rose..
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too bad the worldd is not like this!
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thanks for the comment
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I Like it, good job
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You made me laugh, I think this is pretty funny.
I really don't like the rhyme though
(Irreverent and lightbulb have no partners...poor lonely words)
...You spelled Rainbow wrong
And "attention-span" ...what's an "intentionspan" ?
The poem had some good points that weren't comical, but my favorite part is the last line
I don't like how the word "random" is repeated twice in the poem and I wish you'd separate it into stanzas
With just a bit of revision this could be a nice piece, but then any changes are up to you of course
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