Image credit: Mourning Doves
As eyes meet eyes locked fast with care
and touches push beyond retreat
all logic loses incomplete
in breathless breath of evening air.
And ghost moon shimmers
cooling summer heat,
matching soft touch of
mourning dove
whose silkened wings
coo truth as evening dawns.
Hands held with love shall not compete
with other; each instead, will pair
a blending in such love affair;
affections placed in bond replete.
Smooth skin hovers satin skin,
touching shared caress.
Fearless feelings blend
with subtle craving
as docile, dusted roses sift
within soft-scented frames.
la crainte s'affaiblit dans une main douce quand
la passion se renverse avec la tendresse.
English:
fear wanes within a gentle hand
when passion spills with tenderness
Author notes
Any form, any length (within reason!)
Be gentle, be creative....
Prompt: 5.Avec une legere intimite/ With a Gentle Passion
A "La'libertas", Latin for "liberty":
Stanza 1 - rhyme scheme ABBA, 8 syllables per line.
Stanza 2 - Free verse, 6 lines ONLY
Stanza 3 - Rhyme scheme BAAB, 8 syllables per line.
Stanza 4 - Free verse, 6 lines ONLY
Couplet - Italian (Any language acceptable)
Created by Laura Lamarca
http://allpoetry.com/column/2338016#
Language is French
In a list
A contest entry
- Gnossiennes by Keith.
600 points, ended July 28, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congrats on the trophy here...it was well deserved. You do this form well indeed...this is a beautiful penning
It's nice to see a form brought alive in such a way 
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Laura
Thank you. That coming from the creator of the form is a treat. The contest called for it. I knew it as soon as I saw it and had to use it. Thank you so much for introducing it to me. It is a beautiful form. ~Pamela 
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Beautifully done, and I love the form, it really works well to bring out the imagery in the write. I hear the mourning dove song every day in my back yard and love it. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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ckwriter69
Thank you so much. Always, you are in constant and consistent support of my verse. Thank you. ~Pamela 
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I was going to try this form, many moons ago I copied it to notepad... Now it is lost among the Docs. [like everything else it seems!!!] But your velvety version is really gorgeous, and oh so inspiring...
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Ithica
Thank you so much. I loved this form when Laura first invited me to try one and she pushed me hard to mold me out of my strict meter in the free verse portion to give this form the umph that the free verse portion deserves. I found it to be perfect for this contest. Thank you again. I do hope you will try one of these too and let me know when. I would love to read it. Thanks my friend. ~Pamela
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The words are as soft as the birds. childhood memories of mine are the evening and morning sound of these angels of cooing that evoked stillness in my heart each time I heard them. very well done.
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michael thomas
Thank you so much. I am so pleased you enjoyed this poem and thank you for taking the time to read and comment. ~Pamela
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Intelligent, sensitive and clever--nothing more need be said! A great poem.
Bill
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Bill
Thank you so much. You are so kind with your words and I appreciate them very much. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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When I posted this competition, I never dreamt of the range of entries I would have to choose between. This is a truly beautiful piece, which successfully walks the light tightrope between pure sentiment and bathos. Excellent. How am I going to judge these?
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Keith
Thank yo so much for your wonderful comment and the honor of a silver trophy in your contest. To have even placed with the caliber of poetry entered in this contest still has me in shock. Thank you for thinking my piece was worthy. I appreciate it so very much. ~Pamela
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a wonderful "soft-scented" write that did not stray into mushy sentiment. thanks.
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motel
Thank you so much for taking a moment to read and leave your comments. I am pleased you enjoyed this one. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Gosh!...THUMP!!
Oops sorry! that was my jaw hitting the floor..l.o.l.
Outstanding piece, Loved the rhyme free verse angle, that was tight! oh and the language switch? FLAT OUT HOTT!!
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Richard
Thank you my friend. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. I appreciate your kind words so much and the constant support you lend to my work. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Very nice piece i truly enjoyed it, my best wishes always.
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KarlWeiss - Topaz
Thank you so much for taking a moment to read and comment. I appreciate your kind words very much. ~Pamela
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