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Creation

Oceans of violets and blues,
Frosted morning dew,
A reverie of love held inside
by the portrait of a drowsy child.

Languid roseshell azaleas,
Images of a golden heart,
Grasped by the fingers
Of an unborn child.

Author notes

Was originally made for a class, but I really wanted to post it for the public.

Beautiful, isn't it?

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  • Dorick
    July 15, 2008
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    Maybe beautiful, depends on what you find pretty...
    Why'd you give up rhyme in the second stanza?


    • tricia
      July 15, 2008
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      Rhyme?

      I didn't notice any rhyme until you pointed it out. this probably needs more work, but i am really proud of this part.