Verse without rhyme
Is Poetrys crime
That’s why I suppose
It was always called Prose
Don’t open the door
To the Metaphor
Poetry in code
Is what I deplore
Good poetry paints its own pictures each time
It needs no art additions to back up its rhyme
The shaping of poems has quite often been tried
It can help to distract from the poor Poem inside
At times when I read, rhymeless, catalogues of words,
Laced with metaphors and much depleted verbs
Imagery for its own sake, no narrative to make
No sign which direction that the Poem might take
Then after its conclusion a footnote is required
To explain in plain English just what had transpired.
A contest entry
- Do You Write Serious Poetry or the Kind that Rhymes? (Contest) by Peripatetic.
1400 points, ended July 29, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cliches Will Be The Death of Me by Wolf Run0.
600 points, ended November 2, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Please Raise Your Hand If You Are A Poet by Quill.
700 points, ended May 29, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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what! form more important than substance and variety
some are institutionalised whilst others run free dancing naked their expression playing with reality.
i can understand why this won gold, but find it a little dogmatic.lol
what use is sharp mind if it can't cut itself.LOL
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what a guy you are - the master of poetry
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The Truth is the proof -
you pegged it. A suggestion on two deplorable facts you might want to add in. 1) the use of rhyming dictionaries is almost always obvious - the rhyming words are selected and the prose in front is of them is drummed up, usually having little or just a vague relation to anything else in the poem: 2) endless lamenting about suicide cutting, witches vampires, and adolescent love awry should be excluded as poetry and redirected to the nearest dumpster. Just thoughts. Congrats on you very fine work - b
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billpoet
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Poetricality" Glad you liked it.I really put the cat amongst the pigeons when I posted this one.
Best Wishes George
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HAHAHAHA!!!
Lovelovelovelove~
Very nice, a bashing of freeverse and abstractness. Very much what I was looking for and wonderfully rhymed. Don't get me wrong, I'll dabble into the freeverse pot every once in a while, but this contest is looking for cliche-bashing and you did just that. Very nicely done, I laughed as I read it. Thumbs-up, and best of luck! God Bless!
-Vivian
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WolfRunO
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Poetricality" glad you like it
Best Wishes and Kindest Regards George
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true
but i must confess
that i am one of those
but this does make a good rant
thank you!
and good luck -
"Poetrys" :should be "Poetry's"
This is sort of funny, and full of pedestrian rhyme!
. I can't say I agree that free-verse isn't poetry, though LOL.
Thanks for the entry.
-sailor ptolema
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As a free-verse writer myself, I have to say that I am ashamed when people write these horrid diary-entry-type ramblings and call them "poetry". Free-verse, just like form-poetry, has a structure (though much-less rigid) and can be brilliant when written well. But of course, there are always exceptions to that rule.
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Immortal
Many Thanks for your comments on Poetricality it was written tongue in cheek to stir up a little healthy
controversy but there is an element of truth in it.
I believe that to judge Poetry in the same contest as
"Free Verse" is unfair especially when a "Free verse.judge
awards a trophy to an inferior "Free poem" by-passing
better rhyming poems,and vice-versa.Dont you agree ?
Best Wishes and Kind Regards George ++++ -
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As I said, while I am partial to free-verse, it has no effect on my judging. In fact, I admire people who can write well in forms, and have even created my own form of poetry... It just doesn't work for me, as I found forms to be too restrictive, and I don't believe that anything I wrote for English class in high-school is a viable representation of my true capabilities.
There are horrid free-verse poems, but there are also horrid form-poems. I've read some of both that just don't appeal to me. What I typically look for is something that sticks like a knife in the gut, and I find that the best poems are ones that are not restricted by meter and syllable-counts.
Poetry is the author's freedom of expression, though I very much dislike when people write diary-entries and pass them off as free-verse.
Writing
like this
is not free-verse
but mediocre
crap disguised
as poetry.
Thanks again
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Don’t open the door
To the Metaphor
Poetry in code
Is what I deplore
that made me smile
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thank you for the lovely entry
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congratulations on your lovely poem winning bronze. The contest by Peripatetic was well thought out and intelligent. Your entry fit it nicely.
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OH my! Perfect example. Especially after reading the comments.
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Elegant free verse that speaks plainly with imagery and metaphor used to make a point is fine, perhaps even grand, but your polemic points out the failing of so much that is offered up in that style. It is indeed a poor poem that cannot stand without the buttress of comments explaining what it means.
Your poem may be viewed as stating its case a little too strongly, especially in the first two verses, but I enjoy your argument in rhythm and rhyme.
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