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I love her - I love her not

I love her
I love her not
A picture
Sit Beautiful
On my desktop

My stomach
Keeps turning
Round and Round
The butterflies
Anxious Angry
The waiting
To be found

I love her
I love her not
I've told her
More than once
But I think she forgot

Black and White
Still Image
Staring back at me
Sweet sultry smile
Making me beg please

I want you for love
Not Sex

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  • Patpowers silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    Such a nice work of poetry Marc! I too support with the comments made on this poem. First time reviewer...hope to check out more of yours. THANKS!!!


  • Sam-I-Am
    July 17, 2008

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    oh wow.... this is really really good.. and I agree with the other comments. It is really sweet.
    cool
    Sam


  • pulsating
    July 15, 2008
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    you need a flower...to find out how she feels. the ending is nice and refreshing to read...


  • Second.Choice
    July 15, 2008

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    Awwee thats such a sweet poem I can see you really like her So sweet! Love it, it flows beautifully
    xx


  • crazyash007
    July 15, 2008

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    that was a sweet poem.......

    I love her
    I love her not
    A picture
    Sit Beautiful
    On my desktop

    this part is sooooo sweet.......

    and offcourse the last 2 lines........it shows pure love feelings and nothing more than that.......gud work


  • attack110
    July 15, 2008
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    simple yet effective. i really like this. and i know exactly where you're coming from. good write. BTW the title in the shameless box was a lil tacky.


    • Marc-Andrews
      July 15, 2008
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      I love her - I love her not

      haha.... Yea i'm not to good at this shameless box thing yet LOL I need to find a balance between getting peoples attention without going over the top in some crazy statement XD

      Thanks for the comment


      Marc

  • mycatsasha
    July 15, 2008
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    FINALLY!!

    Not sex!! Yay!
    I thought this poem was really sweet! I always think it's so sweet when a guy has a picture of his girl placed prominently on his desk at home or at work. It shows that she is a very important part of his life. Your poem uses great imagery to get this across.

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