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without strings

she gave him money
he bought drugs
to still his tremble

thus he gave her grief

she rejected it
and hoped
he might
live another day
and maybe find
a way to better life

she knew
that gifts with
strings attached are
simply business deals

now he gives
without expectation
because she showed him how

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 20

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    YOU HAVE RAISED A TRUTH IN A THOUGHTFUL POETRY....well done ..and my thanks for entering such a wonderful entry in my contest...

  • samm
    July 17
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    you had great thoughts and you captured it :]
  • judyjudyjudy
    July 15

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    Of course, another alternative would be not to have anything to do with this person. But perhaps he is her son so that would be difficult.

    "gifts with strings attached are simply business deals" It's hard being at the receiving end because you feel you should be giving in return. Not quite you are talking about perhaps but I find the whole giving/receiving dynamic really fascinating.

    Excellent write because you raise these questions.