Twin towers stood tall in New York City,
hollow mountains reduced to pity.
Symbols of progress they scraped the sky,
a haven for dreams refusing to die.
America entered a deadly time
as religious zealots promoted crime.
The country wept as planes pierced concrete
for death and destruction were complete.
Structurally slit as with a knife
from the impact of life striking life.
Fire melted girders and twisted steel,
surrounded by death life seemed surreal.
Choked by smoke no alternatives found
desperate souls jumped to the ground.
God’s name is heard above panicked screams
praising Allah though murder blasphemes.
Holy doctrines promote blatant hate
challenging freedom’s ultimate fate.
Shock melds souls and hearts of a nation
as they mourn this abomination.
A contest entry
- 5 OPTION -- Prewrites allowed by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended July 29, 2008, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning the Gold. This would be a tough subject for a lot of people to tackle. You did it justice. This line:
"praising "Allah's great", though murder blasphemes"
is a nice statement without the chest thumping that seems to always follow any discussion on 9/11.
Congratulations again on your win.
Amythest
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Awesome Recounting...
of one of the worst days in our history!!! I liked your rhyme sceam and and your choice of vocabulary was so spot on that it painted such a vivid imagery of that day and the towers and eveything that day entails. I would love for you to read my entry here on my reaccount of 9/11...it is called "I Will ALways Remeber" just scroll down the contest entry page...I thank you in adavnace if you decide to read and look forward to hearing what you thought of it!!! Again, Very awesome job on this let us ALWAYS REMEMBER!!!!!~~Toni~~
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As far as any 911 write I've read -- This is one that tops the list. I enjoyed the form & the rhyme. Both gave a smooth read. Excellent job!
Thanks for entering the contest & sharing your work with me I do appreciate the opportunity to read it.
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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